Loved one side

[angel222]

Alright, this is another poem I wrote, I'd be happy if you guys tell me what you think.

Loved one side

I sit with my glance cast up to the September sky
Leaves play on the rhythm of a windy lullaby
This loneliness is killing me
I only wish you could see

Let go of me let go of my hand
I have to make my stand
I can?t wait any longer
Even without you I can be stronger

Like rain in the fall
These tears run down my eyes
I don?t know who to call
So I leave the phone in it?s place

You?re never here to see me cry
All this time I wondered why
I?m always second even thought you say I?m first
But I know she?s the only one who can quench your thirst

I gave you my heart and my life
But your betrayal cuts through me as a sharpened knife
You say I am the only one
But your mistakes will never be undone

Like snow on a cold winter?s day
These tears fall on to the ground
I don?t know who?s left to stay
So I leave it all where it is found

With my last tears I?m leaving you behind
After all these years I made up my mind
I hoped for the love you?ve given to another
I?ll do the same so you don?t have to bother

Take her hand and let go of me
This lonely love was never meant to be
I have to leave you behind
But this sorrow will never leave my mind

Like sun in the spring
This relieve warms my mind
I left you my ring
When I left you behind

[twistedrealityoflove]

wow that was very good! I like it, and could very well relate to it in many ways. ok I'm good

[Mellie]

it's so melancholy and sad, unrequited love bites XD Beautifully done once again, your grasp of English amazes me becaue you pwn it better than I a native XD