Shots Fired - Epilogue
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Shots Fired - Epilogue
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Well, that's my first fic. I would deeply appreciate some comments and suggestions from multiple people. I plan on being an active member of this forum, and I'm pretty sure I'll keep writing in the future. Thanks for reading!
-0mikr0n
PS: If you've got questions, post 'em! I'd be happy to answer them.
-0mikr0n
PS: If you've got questions, post 'em! I'd be happy to answer them.
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I like the way you made the ending Relena's diary. Very insightful.
I think it's kind of funny, a little, the way it ends so calmly. I mean after all they went trough. But I really like the way Relena sees her relationship with Heero.
As for Nadya being pregnant, well it certainly is a surprise.
Oh. And Heero getting himself fixed, well that was interesting. But I guess it makes sense, when you're a pseudo-leader of the world you can't really go around having kids huh? And Heero did do it to protect her in a way so it is very Heero like.
Well. I enjoyed your story and certainly look forward to more.
I think it's kind of funny, a little, the way it ends so calmly. I mean after all they went trough. But I really like the way Relena sees her relationship with Heero.
As for Nadya being pregnant, well it certainly is a surprise.
Oh. And Heero getting himself fixed, well that was interesting. But I guess it makes sense, when you're a pseudo-leader of the world you can't really go around having kids huh? And Heero did do it to protect her in a way so it is very Heero like.
Well. I enjoyed your story and certainly look forward to more.
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Hey, my pleasure. This certainly was quite fun to read, I'll say that outright.
I have to thank you though, HiFreak. Without you responding to this, I admit that I might have ditched it. Thanks for your undying support; it saved the story!
As for the ending... well, keep in mind that it happens two months after the raid, so Relena's had a quite a bit of time to think... and to plan. I decided to show a view from her diary because the story truly focused on her, although I didn't plan it that way from the beginning... I unconsciously stuck her right there in the middle of the story all the time, which wasn't my intention, but it ended up working out perfectly.
I need a female perspective though, HiFreak... how was the romantic side of it?
And was I cliche in any sense? Anywhere? I would appreciate any insight!
I have to thank you though, HiFreak. Without you responding to this, I admit that I might have ditched it. Thanks for your undying support; it saved the story!

As for the ending... well, keep in mind that it happens two months after the raid, so Relena's had a quite a bit of time to think... and to plan. I decided to show a view from her diary because the story truly focused on her, although I didn't plan it that way from the beginning... I unconsciously stuck her right there in the middle of the story all the time, which wasn't my intention, but it ended up working out perfectly.
I need a female perspective though, HiFreak... how was the romantic side of it?
And was I cliche in any sense? Anywhere? I would appreciate any insight!

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HiFreak, you saved my existence. Thank you...
And PLEASE don't tell Relena that I read her diary... she'll fire me and force me to live on the streets before sending a strike team to pick me up... and then she'll have them drag me into her office... and she'll say...
"Have you learned your lesson?"
Just before rehiring me.
And PLEASE don't tell Relena that I read her diary... she'll fire me and force me to live on the streets before sending a strike team to pick me up... and then she'll have them drag me into her office... and she'll say...
"Have you learned your lesson?"
Just before rehiring me.

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I always love Kevin Viscotti's opinion.
no, but really, the romantic side was very good actually. I was kind of surprised when I realised you were a guy ^_^; no offence. Of course it was a little angsty but that's just the way the fic was. Besides a little angst is always needed.

no, but really, the romantic side was very good actually. I was kind of surprised when I realised you were a guy ^_^; no offence. Of course it was a little angsty but that's just the way the fic was. Besides a little angst is always needed.
\"A common mistake that people make when trying to design something completely foolproof was to understimate the ingenuity of complete fools.\" -- Douglas Adams Mostly Harmless Book 5 of The Hitchhiker''''s Guide to the Galaxy
" A God that men can percieve isn't really a God, is it?"
" A God that men can percieve isn't really a God, is it?"
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Kevin: "Well, after being hunted all over Zurich, Relena's finally caught me (at the airport, I was heading to Mexico) and dragged me ALL THE WAY back to Switzerland by the ear... she was saying something about cowardice, but I really couldn't hear her...
"And now I can't hear anything. Oops. Anyway, keep reference to the "The End...?" thing... maybe my buddy 0mikr0n here might go a little bit more into the details later!
Cheers!
- Kevin James Viscotti
Yuy Institute Representative
"And now I can't hear anything. Oops. Anyway, keep reference to the "The End...?" thing... maybe my buddy 0mikr0n here might go a little bit more into the details later!
Cheers!
- Kevin James Viscotti
Yuy Institute Representative
