Bad Day POEM

dragonmaster892005 · Post by **dragonmaster892005** » Tue Feb 21, 2006 9:54 pm

i was having a really bad day when this happened so sorry if it is harsh or even hard to understand.

IN A BIND

when i turn
you will burn
feeling the rage i built inside

they arrive
just in time
to free my soul and mind

the power builds
it never fails
for all i need is some time
oh my it's quit a bind

when i turn
you will burn
feeling the rage i built inside

i watch the moon
and turn towards you
to express whats hid inside

let it fly free
then we will see
the power that it hides
oh my it's quit a bind

when it turn
you will burn
feeling the rage i built inside

when it turn
you will burn
feeling the rage i built inside

oh my it's quit a bind

sorry that it is bad but posting it anyway

dragonlady9 · Post by **dragonlady9** » Sun Feb 26, 2006 5:05 am

That was great, don't u worry ur little head, friend! Poets alike understand! :razz:

dragonmaster892005 · Post by **dragonmaster892005** » Tue Feb 28, 2006 5:54 pm

you like really i didnt think it was all that great in fact i think it is horrible

dragonlady9 · Post by **dragonlady9** » Tue Feb 28, 2006 6:41 pm

Horrible?! Whomever told U that? The poem made perfect sense to me and I REALLY liked the rhymes & rythemn! I could be wrong, but I thought the poem spoke of being in a bind that was really hurting someone to the point of anger,

anger, that once unleashed another person would be in danger of that hurt?...

Am I wrong, friend? Feel free to read some of MY poems, I swear that some are slightly darker because of how I was feeling that day... Keep up the great work!!!

lilac310 · Post by **lilac310** » Tue Feb 28, 2006 7:17 pm

nice...could be a lyrics to a rock song...

The Elelmental Paladin · Tue Feb 28, 2006 7:31 pm

If he could ever spell correctly.

dragonmaster892005 · Post by **dragonmaster892005** » Thu Mar 02, 2006 4:13 pm

funny paladin, lilac what you mean a rock song
dragonlady i was pretty angery that day but i still dont understand why you think it is good

angel222 · Post by **angel222** » Fri Mar 03, 2006 6:55 am

*smacks paladin* don't be so cruel! *sticks tongue out*

It actually is a good poem, I especially like this part :

when it turn
you will burn
feeling the rage i built inside

*smirks bitterly* I'd like to try that on some people as well

And I also can see it as a rocksong , maybe by evanescence ?

dragonlady9 · Post by **dragonlady9** » Fri Mar 03, 2006 10:14 am

[color=green]dragonmaster892005[/color] wrote:funny paladin, lilac what you mean a rock song
dragonlady i was pretty angery that day but i still dont understand why you think it is good

I am just an emotions type of person that loves to read.

I could feel the emotion u placed in ur poem and could relate.

Not many people can get emotions across so very well in pieces that they write. Therefore, to myself, Bad Day POEM: IN A BIND was very nicely written.

The "little" mistakes don't matter, the subject material DOES. Hey, to get technical,

I am a HORRIBLE speller and can't figure out grammer to save my life! I have others who enjoy my pieces read, review, and help me edit!

I hope this helps, my friend, and keep up the GREAT WORK!

dragonlady9 · Post by **dragonlady9** » Fri Mar 03, 2006 10:25 am

[color=darkred]The Elelmental Paladin[/color] wrote:If he could ever spell correctly.

If HE... hmmm... :razz: very, very interesting... and informative...

any comments, buddy?... u replied without correcting The Elelmental Paladin...

don't worry, I'm just teasing, ask The Elelmental Paladin, I do that a lot!

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