umm on NC-17

[Lady Casper]

Umm yea working on a seriously graphic fic...havin a hard time with it too.

Is there a way to keep it believable and yet in fantasy?

It hard keeping up with what your writing especially if you left it for a bit and u have no clue what you had said later on...i need some help that...

Any Ideas?

[trekkiexb5]

Humor. Realism. But mostly humor. Writing a lemon from Heero's point of view is hilarious. That's what I did. Don't go all Romance novel. In real life, silk sheets are "rough" and someone always either falls off the bed or smacks the remote to the tv.

Or breaks beds...

anyways, just advice. Mix up the flowerly language with some funny real-life situations.

[Andrea]

It really could be either. Out of the lemons I've written, two have been from Heero's POV. One was seriously humorous, and the other was VERY angsty. It would depend on your writing style. If you're one for comedy, you'll go that way. Or not.

Make sure to ALWAYS keep track of the adjectives and general descriptions you've used. Try not to repeat too much the same things. You can't also make the deal too long, it would seem fake. And they can't either jump right into bed, try to keep balance.

Too much fluff can be too choking at times, but too much angst and tears can turn the reader away.

It's all about balance really. You can IM me for whatever thing you need, or if you want to discuss an idea or whatever.

[Lady Casper]

The problem lies in keeping it so that if it were actually being done in real life.

It's difficult trying to stay between the limit of going overboard and trying to be descriptive...

Plus i always seem to lose track of what the characters are doing and then i get fustrated and mess up on my wording...

is there a way to keep it realistic?

[kmblue]

Well, when I write long fics, I do a outline then I start filling in with the meat of the fic which you may need to do with this one.

As for keeping it realistic, what I do is if it seems like the lemon is drifting too much into romance novel/erotica, I'll usually start paring that area down to the barebones. Keeping it realistic is to avoid really flowery language and words that would make people go WTF such as lovehole, manroot (real life examples). If it seems to romance novel-ish, theres a problem. But you don't want the words to be too harsh like cunt and dick and cock (even though some authors can make those words work)

When I write lemons, I think of how would I want to write and read (maybe TMI) a sexual experience and if I would want to experience one like that.

If you need help, you can im me at nphotgirl184 on AIM.

[Lady Casper]

Yea i might just do that...i still have plenty of diffs that are still a burden.

[Beer-monster]

Personally I would say to avoid trying to write a realistic lemon until you've done it for yourself. However if it is neccessary to plot I'd ask someone who has (and is a close friend who doesn't mind you asking).

However I would say (maybe stating to obvious) that if you are writing from Heero's perspective, don't ask another girl about it. The two genders feel radically different things.

[Lady Casper]

okay how would you do a lemon that is short and to the point?

to beer monster i don't think i would ask anyone...their to much of perverts. And i dont really wanna wait on my writing for experiences...it just slows me down.

[Beer-monster]

their to much of perverts

Odd attitude from someone who wants to write a lemon neh?

[Egg Drop Soup]

trekkiexb5 is right, if you want a specific style you should focus on what sort of ?vibe? or ?mood? you want the story to reflect.

Romance Novel Air?
?Heated kisses and chaste movements shifted their entangled bodies, slowly but surely onto the bed. Their tongues danced among the parted lips, each ignoring the need of air in their lungs.?

Humor Air-in reference to trekkiexb5?s quote, since I couldn?t think of another cute aspect of my own, plus hers seemed more practical.
?He moved upward, his elbow tracing across the wrinkled sheets. It was rough against the tender skin as he continued to slide it upward?but something did not perceive right, for it came into contact with something hard. He continued, paying no attention to the mere annoyance, when suddenly a click was heard, and two sets of eyes turned toward the direction of the glowing screen. ?Why that?s easy?? the red head smiled, her overly bleached teeth, shimmering into the TV camera lens. ?I got on the Zefner plan-5 min a day-?

Sometimes one can have trouble placing the scene perfectly-much due to the fact that fleeting ideas and brief moments of inspiration are invoked by a stubborn muse, who thinks it fun to drive us insane?while we pick our brains for that ?perfect word? or ?phrase?.

Many times reading other stories of the same genre you want to write may help-alongside some good music, and a reliable dictionary.(whom in which I could never live without)

Mainly your own writing style plays a major part in the completion of the story, often if you review your other fics, it may put you back in ?writer mode? and before you know it, the stories done and posted for all to see.

But to get over lack of inspiration, try to find things that interest you, don?t rush it-thought the anticipation may prove to be strenuous, just take your time with it. I;m sure that when your ideas come to you-you?ll be ready and the familiar tapping of keyboard keys will be heard.

This may not be true for all writers, but it helps me when I have trouble. Hopefully I gave at least some sense of good advice, but from reading your previous work, I?m sure you?ll write a beautifully intriguing story.

Thanks for listening to my ramblings?
~EDS