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Mellie
Writing fanfic is not a terrorist action|Mech Pilot Fanboy
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Surrendered

Post by Mellie »

I'm crumbling
My resolve is fading
Who knew
That I could love
Or have it
Like this.

Truly now,
Save your kiss
For when your lips
Touch mine
I lose
All strength to leave

I'm glad
you came
to save me
from the rain
It wasn't too late
And you made me feel

I felt it.
I know I did.
You said it first
You knew
I was gone.
That kiss.
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HeerosChick1842
Fanfic Connoisseur|NewType
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Location: A place that I like to call Hell

Post by HeerosChick1842 »

Very good poem. I like. :salute: It reminds me of myself a little.
Its all fun and games until a rampaging robot destroys half your city! ~*~
Oh...Thats a gun... - George (Case Closed) ~*~
Whats the cause of death?... We believe it is the knife in his back...- Case Closed ~*~
I only eat people who are not full of crap ~*~
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Eienvine
Fanfic demi-god(dess)|Fanfic demi-god|Fanfic demi-goddess
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Post by Eienvine »

Majorly good poem. Great job. "I'm glad you came to save me from the rain . . ." That was my favorite part. Two thumbs up.
  • I always wanted to be somebody, but I should have been more specific.
    - Jane Wagner

    Life is hard. After all, it kills you.
    - Katherine Hepburn
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