(Poem) A Tinge of Happiness

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(Poem) A Tinge of Happiness

Post by Andrea »

This is up to you. It has a meaning to me, but I suppose people can get this some other way. It's up for interpretation. I hope you like it.

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A Tinge of Happiness


A rose for a beautiful lady,
Said the old man
His clothes withered, thorn, and dirty
His hands coarse, dark, and gentle

A tinge of happiness,
Explained the old man
His eyes deep, and honest
His smile, sincere and sweet

Close your eyes, fair lady,
Prompted the old man
His voice soft, and fatherly
His tone, soft, and true

In her hands, soft, clean hands,
Empty hands, full of hardships,
Hardships and struggles
The old man laid his happiness

He smiled, and then sighed,
Watching the gentle lady
So trusting, and yet, so sad
Outstretched hands, asking for joy

He gave her his life,
His joy, and love
Her silvery eyes, asking, confused
Watching a ghost fading away

The old man never returned,
Yet, in her hands, he remained
The coarse limbs of a fatherly ghost
Leaving happiness in a trusting soul

A rose for a trusting soul,
The old man said
A tinge of happiness,
He gave away

Close your eyes,
The ghost said
And trust the world,
Before he smiled, and then left

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Post by Chibi-sitter »

You wrote that?
Unbelievable! Well, no it is believable. You are very gifted, I've read some of your other works. :bounce: I love em and this one too. :wink:

Lovely poetry Andrea :salute:

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Good job! I might be a little lost, but eh my brain doesn't cooperate with me anymore. Ignoring my brain, GOOD JOB!! I liked it. :salute:
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Wow. *shivers* I couldn't really explain it, but it just struck me as well... an out-of-body experience or a afterlife scenario.... I'm babbling.... but seriously, this was NICE! *shivers* Obviously left shivers down my spine.

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Post by Andrea »

You girls are too nice! I should try to write poems more often then...!! Thank you, I really appreciate your comments!!

Faere, you can babble all you want! Lol! :oops:

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Silly. You knew this would be a hit. *loading of cannon* I hope this thing shots confediti. :-?
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Post by Eienvine »

That was really . . . really good. Calla Lily was right- it's hard to say exactly what it is about this poem, but there's something in the way you spin out the mood of the woman searcing for joy, and the old man who gives her a tinge of happiness. Really ethereal, and really beautiful. Wonderful job.
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WOW. That is INCREDIBLE!!!! :D :D I am so impressed!!!

Keep up the good work, Andrea!
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