[Poem] Heaven In Your Arms (R)

Andrea · Post by **Andrea** » Tue Oct 28, 2003 8:18 pm

<b>Heaven in Your Arms</b>
By Andrea Sinisterra
Rated R

Author's Note: So, this is the first poem I've ever written, be nice with me, please. I was just writing the second chapter to Sabotage Backfire, when I went all angsty, and I had to vent out my frustrations somewhere else... AND, this is the outcome... Pretty dark, you'll see... But, I kind of like it. Please, review, I plead! Mwahahahaaa!!!

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There's no such thing as heaven
Just simple words of hope and peace
There's no such thing as love
Just words too empty to please

But then, there's you
A complex set of words
Too heavy, too frightening
For simple minds like mine
To ever understand

It's in your arms where secrets unfold
It's on your lips, where truths remain untold
Inside your eyes, no secrets, all truth
A truth that tells me the fate of my lies

I die and then I cry
Two worlds too far apart
Two voices, deep and hollow
Two faces, scarred and shadowed

Crimson on your pale skin
Rivulets over your golden hair
The emptiness awakening despair
A life that no longer will be

So, it was you,
Angel of dark, angel of night
Mistress of mine,
Temptress of dreams

And swallow in my pain, I will
And swallow in my pride, I will
You were my sliver of hope
My last thread of silver and gold

No longer a ray, or a spear
No longer up, or down, here, or there
In the wake, or the dead
For I have no longer in me, a last shred of fear

It was you in my dreams...
It was you I feared...
I close my eyes, and breathe...
And together, at last...

We shall forever be.

~Fin~

I think I'll give it a shot to writing one a little more on the cheery side. That sentence was confusing.... Is it just me, or is that poem a little too corny??

AngelOfDeath · Post by **AngelOfDeath** » Tue Oct 28, 2003 8:40 pm

Somehow I think I felt as if it should be set to music.

That was a very confusing sentence. Nyar.

I really don't know what else to say, I never really did much with poetry so I don't know how to evaluate it. ::shrugs::

And yes, I think some happier times should be in order now.

HeerosChick1842 · Post by **HeerosChick1842** » Tue Oct 28, 2003 9:04 pm

It was just beautiful and no it was not corny.

Kari · Post by **Kari** » Wed Oct 29, 2003 4:42 am

Begging doesn't suit you heh Andrea?? Well I'll be nice and say what I found about it. Hmm well lets see . I'd say it was something written in Shakespeare style.

We shall forever be.

At least I think so . Don't know him to well. But with that sentence.So I liked it but hurry up with SB 2 huh??

Kari

Andrea · Post by **Andrea** » Wed Oct 29, 2003 10:31 pm

Well... it seems I should <b>definitely</b> NOT quit my fic writing.... but thank you girls for reviewing. And AoD, it's okay, you don't have to say anything, but, I'll try a happier one, deal?

Thanks HeerosChick for you kind words. *gush*

And Kari, well, I don't think you liked this one too much... but don't worry, I'm still writing SB2, I'll send it to Caliborn soon. And, um, Shakespeare?... Um... I don't think so! Hahahaa...!!!

Faye Faye · Post by **Faye Faye** » Thu Oct 30, 2003 11:45 pm

That was a beautiful poem. The structure was nice and the tone was just beautiful. Great work. Look forward to more ^_^

Andrea · Post by **Andrea** » Tue Nov 04, 2003 2:28 pm

Faye Faye wrote: Look forward to more ^_^

Really?

... That's so nice! I think I'll give it a shot... maybe a not so angsty one... Yup.

Morrighan · Post by **Morrighan** » Fri Nov 07, 2003 6:50 pm

Wow!! For a first, that's hella good!!! You got the gift girl, it just all comes out when the right inspiration comes along...

Andrea · Post by **Andrea** » Wed Nov 12, 2003 9:32 pm

Morrighan wrote: Wow!! For a first, that's hella good!!! You got the gift girl

I've been slacking off! I hadn't seen this post!! Oh, Morrighan, so sweet. THANK YOU! I've got the gift...?? I won't laugh, I swear... the gift... what gift... *mumble, mumble* ... ha, gift *grumble, grumble*

Thank you, sweetie. Seriously, you're always sooo sweet with your replies.

RDP · Post by **RDP** » Sat Nov 29, 2003 11:23 pm

Wow. So sensual, moving and tragic...all in your first poem too! (The heartfelt kind that would make it into my English textbook

) Andrea, I am impressed with your talent.

Looking forward to more...and you wouldn't mind if I posted this (and a couple other fics of yours) on my little GW site, would you?

Blissful Ignorance

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