Love's Battle (yet another poem >__<)

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Love's Battle (yet another poem >__<)

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Love?s Battle
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Dedicated to all those who love. I would really appreciate some feedback on this one...I put a lot into it...and for those of you who can actually write, don't be TOO harsh. :wink:





Within bounds and locks
That have no manmade key,
Souls discard human idiosyncrasies
In a word unmade.
Restricting them by tissue;
Forever encasing them by flesh.
But worms you cannot evade,
Treachery.
Be still and know the power within
That your heart yearns for?
That your wounds bleed for.
Kidnap the truth, if you will,
But as time wears you away,
Your significant breathes
And lives on: incased in you.
Bound.
For what you suppress will be freed
And will rejoice in the world
Made within another
Who has already let go.
And she is bound with a word
That you have made
And don?t understand;
Love.
Bob is my avatar. wicked made it for me. She is basically to-the-limit. Except she's bereft. And that is so sad.

Drop it. Like it is hot.

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Post by Morrighan »

Ooh... That was well written! I'm impressed!!!
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Post by cherryflavored1R »

Amazing. I was impressed how much applicability this actually has, whether it was intentional or not. Very well done.

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Post by Lara Winner »

That was beautiful. A poem such as this, when written from the heart, can evoke compassionate understadning. The confusion, uncertainty and the fear of being hurt are all mentioned with truthful detail. Anyone who has loved will see how you've captured the heart's struggle wonderfuly.

I enjoyed this immensely.
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Post by Andrea »

There is perfection in you writing, Melville's Best Friend. Truth in your words that make me wonder if you've ever felt this way... Excellent, and beautiful concept. I concur with Lara, I enjoyed this immensely.

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Post by raine_yuy »

Hey! I didn't know you had such immense talent in poetry! Either you were hiding it or most likely, i'm just a blind idiot.

Ahhh...love. Described by many poets. Felt by most people. And yet it remains elusive in a true sense that it's too massive to be contained into a simple description of words. But some sure describes it so accurately that it takes readers away. I'm referring to your poem of course. Flawlessly descriptive and provocative. Gosh, that's just beautiful. You must write more!
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