Love Me, Love My Dog -- pt. 3/4 -- PG-13

TigerQueen · Post by **TigerQueen** » Tue Apr 22, 2003 10:41 pm

Now is the time for all good stories to turn weird and modern. Remember, people, this is a WORK IN PROGRESS...if it?s completely terrible, please tell me. Be aware of just one thing ? if you hate it because you hate stream-of-consciousness, I really don't think I can change that. I?m stretching my creative wings, etc. I want constructive criticism. I want to know if I?m accomplishing what I mean to do. I want to write this chapter in a less-organized style because a) it?s something I?ve been dying to try and b) I feel it?s a necessary evil to really describe what?s running through Kagome?s head while she ?watches? the video. If you think I?m doing a poor job with the style, please help me ? I?ve never written anything like this before! Thanks!

~♥~

?Kagome? Are you alright, love??

Cold rain. Cold slimy rain. It pokes through her hair slowly ? cold fingers. Cold fingers on her head, cold fingers on her heart.

?Come on, punkin. Let?s getcha home.?

Her Papa is sad. He eyes look tired. He smells of tobacco and mothballs. The mothball smell comes from the museum. They don?t have mothballs there ? it just smells like them. It?s a bad smell. It makes her nose hurt and her eyes water. The animals in the museum look alive, but they aren?t. They stand in glass cages, all alone. She likes the tobacco smell. He smokes a pipe. He?s not allowed to smoke in the museum. You aren?t allowed to touch things in the museum. You aren?t allowed to yell or run around, either.

You aren?t allowed to have a dog for a best friend, either. Yukari laughed through her nose ? a high, ugly sound. Yukari?s best friend is Keiko. Keiko goes to school, too. Keiko wears her hair in a thin ponytail. It looks like a rat?s tail. Keiko nibbles like a rat. Her teeth clank when she eats. But she isn?t a rat. Youkai is a dog. He doesn?t laugh through his nose. He laughs with his mouth wide, a quiet pant. He swallows his food all at once, and never gets a stomach ache. But he?s not her best friend. That?s wrong.

?Look who?s here, Kagome! I couldn?t keep him at home, he was so eager to see you.?

He yips at her expectantly, eagerly. He never understands school. He wants her to be home with him all the time. He wants to play all day long. He doesn?t understand responsibility. That?s a word she learned at school. It means doing what you?re supposed to do, even when it?s not what you want to do. She?s supposed to have a best friend. She doesn?t have a best friend. She doesn?t play with the other girls. The teacher called her anti-social. This means that she eats by herself at lunch. This means that the other girls laugh at her. It?s all his fault, really. If it weren?t for him, Keiko and Yukari would play dolls with her. Keiko threw her doll in the dirt. She said it looked more like a dog toy that way. She said that girls who play with dogs should play with dog toys. She said that stupid stinky girls who smell like dogs should play in the dirt. Stupid dog girls can?t be princesses. Stupid dog girls can?t play dolls. They call her Dog Girl. They throw her doll and tell her to ?fetch.?

?I HATE YOU!?

He whimpers, tilting his head, confused. She?s never yelled at him before. She likes it. It hurts, but it?s different from being called a Dog Girl. It burns and builds and thrashes against the walls of her body, the back of her throat. ?I HATE YOU!? she screams.

?Kagome? Hush, Kagome, it won?t help...you?re hurting him, don?t you see?? don?t see don?t see don?t wanna see just leave me ALONE hurt cold ice fingers burning hate you hate you hate you

Warm fingers on her cheeks: tears. Her nose turns gooey and her throat stings. She hates crying. Crying makes your nose stuff up and your face sticky. Soft fur on her cheeks: Youkai. His warm tongue laps at her tears. She loves Youkai. Youkai is soft and warm and will let you cuddle him if you need it. Youkai is her best friend. But it?s wrong. She pushes him back. He whines. He always whines when he thinks he?s done something wrong. He stole a fish her grandpa sent ? not an icky magic fish, but a yummy fish. Youkai scared away the postman. He ate the whole fish before anyone knew. Mama got mad, and Youkai hid under a table. He whined, but Mama still yelled. She tried to tell Mama that Youkai was just hungry. Papa laughed. Papa always laughs when Mama gets mad. When Papa gets mad, no one laughs.

?I know the girls at school have been mean to you. I?ve been thinking about it for a while, and I thought...would you like to change schools??

Change schools? Go away from Keiko with her rattail hair and Yukari with her ugly laugh?

?It wouldn?t be easy in the middle of a school year, I know, but it would give you a chance at a new start, and...?

White fur jumps in front of her. The car screams. Everything stops but the car?s scream and Youkai?s heartbeat against her body ? th-thump, th-thump, th-thump.

loud scream th-thump angry sharp th-thump cold hard th-thump scared scream th-thump wet fingers th-thump pain fur scream fingers drip drip drip

silence

~♥~

*stares out into the void* Well? Good? Bad? Ugly?

The final bit will come...when I write it U.U which I haven?t done yet. I wanted to finish this before posting it, but I?ve realized that I need feedback on this chapter before I go on to the final third. Please help!

kmf · Post by **kmf** » Wed Apr 23, 2003 12:49 am

What sad memories for Kagome

When I got to the end of this chapter I first thought that it was the dog that was hit, but then I realised that its probably Kagome's dad and the dog saved her. Very much looking forward to the final chapter of this, please do post again soon

kmf

gethmane8 · Post by **gethmane8** » Wed Apr 23, 2003 8:17 am

Wow. The plot is so intruiging, I definitely could go for more. The way you've written it is nice. Has a wild, chaotic fill to it that goes well with the goings on. Poor Kagome. I feel for the girl, especially at the very end. You made me weepy!

Kiyoko · Post by **Kiyoko** » Mon Apr 28, 2003 2:13 pm

Aw that was so sad, it touched my heart! I think this story is wonderful so far and I can't wait for the next chapter. You did a good job of showing Kagome's inner thoughts. Please come out with the next chapter soon and keep up the good work!

dark-angel · Post by **dark-angel** » Sun Jun 29, 2003 3:43 pm

finish it hurry hurry hurry

Kanya Barton · Post by **Kanya Barton** » Tue Jul 01, 2003 11:29 am

Oh please, oh please, oh please finish it! Please please please! I wanna see what happens!! Please, pretty please with a cherry on top?
Peace out!

Kaili Charmer · Post by **Kaili Charmer** » Sat Jul 05, 2003 9:38 pm

ahh! i need the ending!! ~sniffle~ it's too much!

athena · Post by **athena** » Sun Jul 06, 2003 10:31 pm

Hurry and finish it! Its soo sad..we need the romance at the end. I really like how you show the images she sees, and then her other memories. Very mysterious! I hope Inuyasha does something to cheer her up. Please finish it!

dark-angel · Post by **dark-angel** » Mon Jul 28, 2003 10:10 pm

athena's right we need romance at the end please finish it please finish it please please please!!!

Kaili Charmer · Post by **Kaili Charmer** » Tue Jul 29, 2003 8:32 pm

So uh...where's the fourth installment?? You're not just gonna leave us hanging here, are ya? ~pout~

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