Bad Day POEM

[dragonmaster892005]

ok the first of many new poems is coming up now

Finding Love

the steady beat of my heart
makes it seem as you fit the part
i go to leave afraid of pain
just to find you later the same

cant control my reactions
have to act within a fraction
as i ponder upon how to say
these few words to you today

it takes me time to get to you
which makes my time limited to few
as i hurry to find my words
they seem to left me in that turn

hard to speak just a hi
while i try you just sigh
i fear you know and think im weak
til i see a smile begin to peak

you take my hand into yours
while i still look for my losted words
and you speak to me as if you know
i try my best to say lets go

we start to walk hand in hand
its a sign we are more than friends
the pressure leave without sweat
but now i have more to threat

so now how bad is this one and up next have to see later

[dragonlady9]

That was sooooooo beautiful, dragonmaster892005... I LUVED it!!! How have ya been?

[dragonmaster892005]

been hanging on and you

ps it is that good

[dragonlady9]

I have been doing alright. College is finally out! So, my days are much brighter ... Yep, Finding Love is that good! I found you poem very sweet and endearing. I was only confused by the last sentence because I'm not sure as to what you mean by having more to threat. :-? What is the threat? Is it fear of losing love or having more to lose now that the heart is involved or am I just over analyzing everything again? I tend to do thus a lot if not stopped! Part of my personality, sadly! Otherwise, FANTASTICALLY DONE!!!

[dragonmaster892005]

the threat of a lost love that would be better if not loved

[dragonlady9]

:razz: Thanks for the clairification! Will you be posting any more soon? I just luv your poems!

[dragonmaster892005]

i will but why are my peoms so good "for if it were a rose and called be another name would it not smell as sweet" THAT romeo juliet but why my poems others such as your self are so much better than me

[dragonmaster892005]

this is new and fresh

hidden

the unaudiable sound of your voice
for how i wish it to deflate so fast
as i draw faster near the future
i can only hold the past
as that single moment resides inside me
i wish to let out the terany that was taken in
the evil i hold i want no more
than for you died here before me
for both cause the pain not wanted
i cast away all feeling to dive deeply into myself
choosing to remain silent when all else it calls for more
i bore myself to bare what is not mine to suffer
so here i hide deep within the truth to all i feel
for i grant no passage to it not on my free will

enjoy the new peace more to come quickly

[dragonlady9]

Your poems are so honest, so deep. Ever so freely you bare your soul to the readers. Emotions are shown: love, hurt, fear, happiness, sadness, and the list goes on. Yes, there others out there that have great pieces of work such as Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allan Poe... However, every poet has their own voice, their own style, their own views! Your words touch people, for they can relate. Such a feat is great! Not all writers have that gift, to display emotions. Your words paint a clear picture of life. All the drama and feeling of a single moment is captured with your words, much like a picture. Keep up the great work! I can't hardly wait for the next one, buddy!

[dragonmaster892005]

i dont understand your comment clearly

i find myself nowhere near as = to anyone or any thing i just write and not very while but to be compare as so when people how no me think nothing of the sort and not to say you are the only reappearing visittor to post often enough shows that the virdict is different as stated above