hhryah:
Yay!hhryah wrote:I AGREE WITH YOU COMPLETELY. And you certainly did just that.Because of an overexposure to Relena-bashers elsewhere on the net, I?m slightly obsessed with showing Relena?s true role in Gundam Wing and proving that Heero really does care about her even during the canon. And I like to believe that with this, I?ve accomplished that at least partly.
I'm relieved to say it was intentional. You got it exactly right!hhryah wrote:Heero's POV was a little wordier than I expected it to be, what with his math and physics and piloting genius and all, but then I decided I really liked the idea that after being with Relena he hunkered down and read (not to mention in the series he is shown reading) in his new spare time. Thus, he became more articulate. Good call on that, if that was your intent! If not, hey, it worked out awesome anyway!
O.o Really? I never realised!hhryah wrote:I guessed the end. For some reason there are billions of fics that are slightly similar to this one, but always about Duo and his unborn child.
For honesty's sake, I have to mention that I did not come up with this all on my own. I read something, somewhere, that led me to this train of thought. I just can't remember what and where I read it, otherwise I would post a link right here.hhryah wrote:I think my favorite thing you had Heero feel was this:
I'd never thought of it that way. I hadn't though Heero would have felt betrayed, but you made it seem so plausible. Of course he would have felt that way! So amazing kudos to you for shedding more light on their relationship. And the thing about swearing was pretty great too.Learning that Relena, who had once pledged to be on my side, who had set me on the track to freedom in the first place, had devoted herself to total pacifism, hurt. It had been a long time since I felt so betrayed. The greatest shock was probably to find how much I cared. Initially, my response to this was the same as towards J?s actions; fuck you, I?m outta here. (I hope you?re old enough to read this, but if not, I did not teach you those words.) I refused to accept the fact that Relena, once again, held the solution. I refused to follow another human being again, I wanted to find my own way.
I swear, it's creepy how many people respond to this with big grins and red faces from laughing. O_Ohhryah wrote:I also loved the funny bits. "It freaked me out" and "The way he calculated that percentage was actually pretty funny" had me laughing out loud. In my opinion, the best was "In hindsight, it wasn?t really a bright move to ask a family of pacifists to execute me."
The ending lines were so cute. I can see him firmly nodding his head to himself as he vows to protect his new child.
And this is almost as creepy!hhryah wrote:Way to make us all look bad, Omnicat!
I want to marry you. Let's elope. Rose will never catch us!hhryah wrote:How was THAT for feedback?
*huggles hhryah to mush*
