Love Is Another Name for Suicide (poem)

[Perfect Soldier]

Alright, so yeah, i've been pretty inspired to write as of late and right now i'm putting a final stitch over the gash in my heart. Sounds cliche, sure, but hell, all this angst makes for some good poetry. Everyone seemed to like Never Said in some sort of way. Hopefully people can identify some with this. I've been struggling some with alcohol problems and addictions in general. Thanks everyone.


Love is Another Name for Suicide


The poison generously passing through my lips
A calming burn down my throat
Warmth enveloping my insides
Head dizzy, the world seems on kilter for once
My stomach in complete protest

Driven to drink again-
Inadequate and empty,
Another night spent with unwanted company
Mr. Jack Daniels kills the sorrow
But it?ll be back tomorrow

Hangovers are ex-lovers
After it?s finished,
The pain still lingers
Blindsided by over stimulation

Temptation
Temptation
Temptation

You and it, I can only succumb to
Both alike,
Nice at first but a chilling bite
Taken apart
Bare and irrational,
I care no more

It?s killing me

Truly, I am dead inside
The disease claims me,
Bit by bit ever consuming
Dismantled
What the hell am I doing?

It?s love

A condition with no cure
Unpredictable,
Therefore untreatable

My remedy is nothing short of pathetic
Gaps trying to be filled with empty bottles
The drug far too powerful-
Hits without hesitation
Leaves you breathless, aching, yet?
Needing

Can?t go on without the love buzz

Lacking something basic
Incomplete, feeling worthless
Love is a quick fix
You feel good, but eventually worthless
Alcohol filters out the pain
Numbing senses till you cease to be

All this in the pursuit of happiness
A self-induced tragedy
No one can ever begin to imagine
It courses through us knowingly,
But we?re not ready

You can?t ever be ready for death
It?s something you don?t prepare for
Love is death and works best with company

Insanity

People willingly do anything because of it
Addicts to something beyond powerful
It makes you crazy

I must be to ever fall in love

Dead and have no feeling
Killed it all away
Death?s sweet embrace

A victim to what no one can understand

Incomprehensible

Everyone killed themselves- we?ve all had OD?d on the love drug

Suicide isn?t a bad way to die

end...

was that too grim or sloppily put together? I need an honest opinion. Thanks.

[Eienvine]

Yes, it was rather grim. But then, that was the point, was it not? I liked it, though. It was very honest and open, and sometimes the truth is quite grim. Sometimes, it needs to be said, though. All that matters is the truth! Too much late night X-Files watching! Anyway, I really did like it. Thanks for sharing. And I wish you strength in whatever problems you're dealing with right now. Peace out.

[teardropdangel]

oh my. I prefer grim pieces of literature, so on the issue of "too grim" I'm not exactly the person to ask. But I loved it. Heartbreaking but put together nicely.

[Ally]

I like how you repeated Temptation. The word itself means something that won't go away, and repeating it maks you feel like you truely are tempted to try it again and again. You know?

This poem reminds me of that one song but Smile Empty Soul its called bottom Of A Bottle, if you've never heard it go look it up, or just read the lyrics. They hit close to home.

It was quite grim, but like said before, sometime people need to truth, and most of the time the truth is pretty grim. Sloppy? No, even if it was sloppy I think that would fit the mood.

Great job, Zero!

<3 Ally

[Perfect Soldier]

*laughs* thanks and yes I have heard of Smile Empty Soul, I pride myself on being an alternative style punk-rock type. And I appreciate the posotive feed back. Seeing as how my angst has been going lately there will most likely be more. Thanks a lot to Einvine and teardropdangel too. You guys are always so nice.

Zero

[Lady Casper]

0_0 *stunned* that was so...different from some poetry i read. It seemed so real. I love it ^_^

Angst...is always the key.

[silent muse]

damn, that's excellent. great job

[LilTrix]

I loved it. Grim, yes-- but that made it all the more appealing. This poem really got me to thinking... :-?

Good Job