Wrong (C-Entry gw500 #35, PG)

Rose of Betrayal · Post by **Rose of Betrayal** » Sun Aug 22, 2004 12:27 pm

Title: Wrong
Author: Djamilla M.
Word Count: 500 on the nose!
Pairing: None. Darn.
Rating: PG
Author?s Notes: My mind tends to work in strange ways, so I came up with this ficcie. You might also call me completely insane. It?s been rather long since I?ve actually written for one of these challenges.

They look like normal teenagers.

Comfortable. Bored. Completely harmless.

They sit there in the reception room, waiting for me quietly. They look almost normal.

But they?re far from it.

Look closely.

Look at the one with the long braid. Duo Maxwell. He raises a mug to his lips and takes a sip, his beautiful violet eyes focused on the front page of the daily newspaper. Look at those indigo eyes. They flicker from dark purple to almost black. There?s a cold, steely glint in there.

It?s called guilt.

Look at the one with the severe ponytail, a crease between his eyebrows. Wufei Chang. He seems to be asleep, but he?s only listening. Listening to nothing. Look at his frown. Look at the corners of his mouth. There?s a hint of a shadow there.

It?s called sorrow.

Look at the one with the tawny hair half covering his face. Trowa Barton. Look at his emerald eyes as he watches the braided man nibble at his lower lip. Watch him as he looks at his companions. Look at his forehead. There?s a barely visible line there.

It?s called confusion.

Look at the blond one. Quatre Rebarba Winner. He?s the most noticeable. His blue eyes shimmer, his mouth moves as he speaks with the receptionist, who?s come up to them. Look at the set of his jaw. Look how tightly it?s clenched, as if he?s holding in something, restraining something. It puts something on his face, nearly unseen.

It?s called experience.

And then, the last one. Heero Yuy. His dark hair hangs over his Prussian blue eyes, his mouth set in a firm hard line. His arms are crossed over his chest as he surveys the people at the reception desk. Look at his eyes. Look at the cold hard sparkle in them, dark and almost invisible.

It?s called suffering.

They?re far from normal.

Gundam pilots 01, 02, 03, 04, and 05.

Known by many, murdered many. Infamous. Famous. Put on pedestals. Expected to do the right thing. Never expected to do the wrong thing. Loved. Hated. Worshipped.

People know them. But they don?t know them, either.

Why?

Because they?re supposed to do the right thing, make the right decisions. Lead the way for the people. Because they know everything, because they are people who do everything perfectly. Perfect species among common citizens.

Like me. Relena Darlian.

Everything they say isn't true. They just think it is.

We make mistakes. We make thousands of wrongs, we make bad decisions. We stumble, we drag, we fumble, and we?re human.

We?re just human.

We?re driven to make all our wrongs right. We make more wrongs to make a right, even.

How do I know? How do I know that we make more wrongs?

Look at this glint in my eyes. Cerulean, calming, and pure, they say. But look at it closely. It?s almost black, misty. Nearly imperceptible. It was a mistake made long ago. Do you want to know what it is?

It?s called hate.

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~FIN

Mellie · Post by **Mellie** » Sun Aug 22, 2004 2:18 pm

Wow, that was very good. Excellent characterization. Tied in everything perfectly! Good job!

AnShino · Post by **AnShino** » Sun Aug 22, 2004 4:46 pm

I second that! Wonderful job =3

lilac310 · Post by **lilac310** » Sun Aug 22, 2004 11:52 pm

:: gasps::

This is absolutely stunning...Never in my entire "Gundam Wing" life have I read something as simple yet so compelling as this...Your style in laying out the words is very unique..It almost sounds like poetry in my ears...There was that rhythm going on..."It's called guilt...It's called sorrow.." and you went on and on..

..just wonderful...You kept it simple and straight to the point yet you still managed to make such an impact for me....Great job!

Morrighan · Post by **Morrighan** » Mon Aug 23, 2004 9:23 am

Excellent, DJ!!! This is awesome, despite its supposed "oddness".

The characterizations are there and they hit with force!

Awesome, awesome, awesome!!!

Lady Casper · Post by **Lady Casper** » Mon Aug 23, 2004 3:49 pm

Man this was really describing the gang.

It was really cool how you did it too.

Great work!

Raspberry · Post by **Raspberry** » Mon Aug 23, 2004 4:01 pm

Wow, this was great!

So... true.

And the last line was quite surprise for me

Good job!

Eienvine · Post by **Eienvine** » Mon Aug 23, 2004 9:04 pm

This really was so good, because it's so . . . different. The voice and POV were not what you usually read at all, and it was so honest. No sugar coating here. Very vivid descriptions, and nice overall structure. I give it two thumbs up.

bookworm · Post by **bookworm** » Tue Aug 24, 2004 7:52 am

I agree w/ the rest of them. This is a great fic that is compelling and has depth to it. The consequences of the war. Good job!

Crazygurl · Post by **Crazygurl** » Tue Aug 24, 2004 6:38 pm

Is there a sequel?

Blissful Ignorance

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