GW500 #29 - Unsure

[Neoen]

Umm..this is my first time at trying one of these contests, so it isn't very good. It's exactly 500 words though! That's a good point!

I would love a reviewer beta, if anyone won't mind. Thanks for reading!


Unsure (hesitant title, I'm terrible at titles)


She woke to the experiences of morning, something she didn?t realize she missed. Alone in the bed, her hand on the warm dip of mattress that he previously occupied, she debated her next step. Weakness had brought her to him again, late at night and slightly inebriated, but he was ready and accepting of her.

Always accepting of her.

It drove her crazy most of the time, except for when she was too weak to care.

Previous encounters had showed her that he would be in the kitchen making her breakfast. He knew what she liked, black coffee and a Spanish style omelet, how he knew she wasn?t quite sure. That gesture alone prevented her from any accusations of their...connection being mutually physical. Purely physical partners did not make breakfast for each other.

The last time, if she remembered correctly, she had dressed and coldly assessed him when he came into the bedroom, breakfast tray in hand. A few harsh words and she strolled out the door, ignoring his look of pain and understanding (which infuriated her).

The time before that she had snuck out like a stray cat, too sophisticated to be caught sleeping. He had called her a few times which she would never answer and eventually he gave up or backed off. She wasn?t sure which it was because while he stopped calling, she had a feeling he didn?t give up on things that easily.

So many mornings and so many escapes, accusations, even arguments when she could pick them out of him. She was running out of ideas.

Of course, it occurred to her occasionally, when she was still lying awake on the bed, nestled in his sheets and scent, that she could just stay here. What would happen then? Would he be happy or surprised? Or would it be an uncomfortable situation, as if he always just assumed she would run and had no idea what to do if she actually stayed. She didn?t really blame, she didn?t have any idea of what to do either.

The sounds of cooking had stopped and the news was shut off. He was coming. Her hands felt heavy and numb, blood rushing from her heart to her head.

Maybe if she pretended she was still asleep...

Embarrassment at her ridiculous behavior had her cheeks flushed. The soft taps of his foot steps into the room stole her breath. She could get up now and start a fight, then make a quick exit.

The tinkling of glass rang out when he set the tray on the night stand. Her fingers throbbed with their tight clutching. She could feign sleep until he went away and then slip out quietly.

The bed dipped with his weight and suddenly he was there. She could smell him and feel his warmth settling into her skin.

?Thank you.? He whispered, touching his mouth to her cheek, and she opened her eyes.

Or maybe she could try his omelet and coffee, just to see what she?s been missing.

[Morrighan]

Excellent job! It was ambiguous as to who you were referring to, but the mystery makes the reader think, I suppose. In many ways, I think it's applicable to many of the GW couples - I have yet to figure out which one.

From all the other responses that I have read, this one definitely has a different ring to it. It's not a bad thing because it makes this piece unique from all the rest.

There's nothing wrong with standing out.

Again, great job!

[Beck]

I agree too about the mystery behind who this could involve. Though in my mind, I pic 4xD, the woman's reaction would be something that she would do or treat a guy like that from her past experiences of them being together. I was quite happy to see the girl stay and even more so, the delight on the man's side that their partner had stayed as well.

If you like for me to post this on the challenge community, I'd be more than happy too since today is the last day for this topic. I'd like to have an email or something so ppl can send comments to. But its no biggie if you don't.

Nice job overall with the fic though! I'm glad to see more ppl writing for these challenges whenever the inspiration strikes.

[Calla Lily]

*sigh* This was wonderful. I'll have to agree with Beck, though, I picture this to be a 4xD in mind for the reasons that she stated earlier.

But still a very wonderful entry!

~Calla.

[Raspberry]

Yeah, I think it's 4xD, too.

This pairing suits this fanfic very well, so...

I really liked this fic. Good job!

[Isabel]

This was awesome, especially for a first try, absolutely superb, and not using names, well it reminds me of Hemmingway, whose work I really like.

[Ainohikari]

wonderful! true that it coould be any pairing... but not really Rx01... he'd be the one running... But QxD does sorta seem right.... as does HSx02.... anyway! great story!

[Eienvine]

I melted. Seriously. At the last sentence, I melted. That was so sweet, and so well written. You said so much in so few words, which is really a gift.

And to put my two cents in, I'd like to this it's 2xH, though I suppose Q & D make more sense.

[Mellie]

Aww, this was so sweet! It reminded me a little bit about another story I read (pillow talk). They weren't the same, just reminiscent of each other. Too me, it was zechs and noin... who knows. Bravo!

[Neoen]

Thanks for all the nice comments! I guess I missed the deadline, oh well, lol.

Any suggestions or comments about improving? I'm sure it could use some work.

Oh, I didn't use names because I like the reader to fill in the blanks, but a lot of you guessed the correct couple.