Kenshin's Thoughts

Whispered Dreams · Post by **Whispered Dreams** » Sun Dec 07, 2003 5:56 pm

Kenshin's Thoughts
By: Whispered Dreams

Walking through the darkest medow,
So dark, I can barely see.
Then I spot my shadow's shadow,
And I know he is following me.

I know soon, he will catch up,
But still, I start to run.
Hopeing, praying he will give up,
This "game" he finds so fun.

I run just as fast as I can,
Wishing for escape.
Escape from this horrid man,
Who has stolen my face.

All the torture he has caused,
All done in my name.
Killing these innocents without cause,
While I watch them be maimed.

Then I realize who he is,
My evil past, returned.
Come to haunt me, that it is,
While my back is turned.

My eyes pouringtears of shame and hurt,
While running till I trip and fall.
And stay that way, with my face in the dirt,
Giving up, giving up it all.

Knowing I will never be happy,
With a past that haunts me so.
Blood-stained hand that are sappy,
As I shout in anguish,"NO!"

Silence of the night, I've broken,
Just like so many souls.
Silent screams never spoken,
It's only I who hears them, I know.

I know the darkest secret,
Of my living-hell filled past.
While I can not keep it,
I hope this torture ends fast.

Now ther is someone in my life,
To help me cope with it.
To help me clean off this knife,
Setting souls to peace with this.

~owari~

a/n it sucks i know but its my first kenshin...anything. n e wayz i wont be surprised when no one reveiws and i probably wont post in this forum again. oh well. Ja ne

WaterGoddessX · Post by **WaterGoddessX** » Tue Dec 09, 2003 9:26 am

Nah, if it was your first Fic then it was pretty good. When I first startied writing my fics really sucked and I mean sucked my friend told me to stop writng but, then as I kept trying they got better. Its all good don't worry. Well it whenever Laterz.

EKmisao · Post by **EKmisao** » Fri Dec 19, 2003 11:03 am

~~Jaw has dropped~~

This was SO good. Keep up the good work! Sorry, but you left me speechless. I have no more words to say.

EK 8 )

Gundam Girl · Post by **Gundam Girl** » Fri Dec 19, 2003 9:06 pm

It was good. At first I was thinking "Kenshin vs. Battousai." I've always enjoyed the philosophy that Kenshin, Battousai, and Shinta are three different people. Which could be really deep if you thought about it enough.

*should take a phsychology class*

Kudos for the poem!

-GG

Lord Scarlet Angel Of Dea · Thu Jan 22, 2004 10:56 am

morning dew star · Post by **morning dew star** » Fri Jan 23, 2004 4:04 pm

Awsomeness! Pure awsome! I could never write anything Kenshin becuase I can never meet it standards, but you've done great! This is simply...stunning! Its not bad! You're great! And it rymes! I'm not good at ryming stuff and maknig it sound good, so this is soo cool!

Elyn Yuy · Post by **Elyn Yuy** » Mon Jan 26, 2004 10:36 pm

*reads again, now the second time*

It's still good!!!

Keep it up!!!

Whispered Dreams...you ought to add another dozen to this poem!

Elyn Yuy

Karama's Koabito · Post by **Karama's Koabito** » Thu Mar 04, 2004 7:00 am

It was full of emotion

But very good for a first try. i know all my stories are told from the first person so they seem confussing and dull. I'm a better play right then anything. Keep up the good work.

Dark Ryu · Post by **Dark Ryu** » Thu Mar 04, 2004 1:55 pm

Wow that's very good. You write with a lot of feeling.

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