Never get behind a horse. One way or another they will say hello. ~Me
I believe in myth and legend, not the reality of war.
Anomynous: Anybody got a carrot? A cookie? Gingersnap?! ...I''m in trouble.
Horse: Feed me now, and I will not shit in your window. Elyn Yuy
:evil: Ooooh...naughty!!! ON the island with the statues as a witness!!! I really liked it!!! I think that the description was well made and Heero wasn't OOC at all. Good job!!!
Favorite quote: Death is only the end result given to you at birth. Dorothy Catalonia
loving the chapter and diffinatly loving the lemon
My theme song is Adieu I'm Noin from GW.
I'm Rei from Nerv. My stereotype is Tough Boy.
"... She stopped. Had it been her heart they failed her, or had her eyes, veiled in the mornfulness that lies over all the wild things on earth, seen the hopelessness of longing that will find out sometimes even a savage soul in the lonely darkness of its being?" Conrad, The Heart of Darkness
Finally I found the right time to read the new 2 chapters.
I like the both versions and I really can't tell you if you should keep the lemon or not. Perhaps you could simply have 2 different versions
I don't see such Heero OOC for the lemon part: I think he is even more intimate in other part of his journal and I agree with Mel about this topic.
Btw, I like very much the image the love scene under a thunderstorm. A very good idea