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Unsaid (poem)

Post by cherryflavored1R »

Blech.... my first poem to post... I feel so weird about this. Review please, good or bad. (ducks and covers)

Unsaid

There's so much I want to say
I can feel it
Dying to escape my lips

My body twitches with excitement
My brain teems with activity
Aching to describe what I feel for you...

But nothing comes
My lively ocean of thoughts
Dries to a desert...

And I'm left staring at you
My lips moving,
Completely devoid of sound

So... for everything I can't say
I'll make up for... someday.
Until then, I give you the gift of silence




Okay, that's it, it sucks. *dodges tomatos... tomatoes... something like that* Kinda short, yeah. Kinda is bad, yeah.

But who cares?

I'm gellin... like a felon.

-Cherry
I come from tha M effin' Negaverse, yo. I wantcho energy.

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Post by Morrighan »

OMG, I totally know how that feels. Yick. Not fun.

This is rather expressive, even if you deem it unworthy....
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Post by Eienvine »

I like it! I totally know the feeling, and you expressed it so well. Way to go.

And yes, you are gellin' like a felon. (I just love that commercial . . .)
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Post by Lara Winner »

This did not suck! I thought it was a refreshing bout of fluff. Lovely poem.
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