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[twistedrealityoflove]

In the spur of the momment I started writing this. I have a general story plot down but I need suggestions to make it better and fill in the spots that don't seem right, don't be to harsh (unless it's needed). It's a mixture of full metal alchemist, a tad of inuyasha, and a few other animes. I'll also note who helped when I'm finished with it.

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Blood Cut



He stared out at the ocean as he sat there on the beach. He watched the sun dissapear over the horizon along with the tourists and sightseers. Eventually there were only the occasional couples walking by. He enjoyed what he could before he had to go back to his duties that tuesday night.

Joey, being head commander of the wolf devision in the new military, didn't have an easy job. He'd often lead battles into unknown territory, killing inocent people. Around his parts he was known as (need something to nickname him) as he conveiniently used alchemy to store all four elements in his sword and kill whom he told. He regreted it deeply, but in oder to keep his sister, who was suffering from cancer, in radiation to get better it was needed.Closely followed by his regrets was his best friend Jerico, who also joined the new military to give his 20 year old sis a better life than what she had at home with their father. Joey and Jerico being in the same division, and Jerico being one rank lower then Joey, they both shared a room which allowed the to talk about their sisters freely.

Joey walked back to the base with his sword strapped to his back. When he returned he checked on all the base gaurds to make sure they weren't asleep or slacking off then returned to his room. Thinking about his siter in the hospital, and his passed on parents who were murdered. He realized how often he'd been talking to Jerico about if there was a possible way to use alchemy to trap the souls of his parents and Jericos mother in objects they left behind. He entered his darkened room, closed the door, and nearly jumped out of his skin at the sound of both Jerico's voice and the flick of the lights.

"Hey there buddy where ya been?" asked Jerico sitting on the couch, " Relax its just me."

"You've got to stop doing that!" Joey responded

"Yeah, I know. One day you'll fall over dead because I scared the shit out of ya!" he smiled, "You still day-dreaming of when your sis is healty, how your going to quit the military? Haven't I told you to forget about it? We'd have to die before we quit the damn military. The Head Commander just wouldn't have it."

"You can't help but dream can ya?"

"Amen to that."

"Any way why are you still up?" asked Joey.

"Just, thinking about this sunday. Man, your going to be in for a treat! My sis is coming to stay with us for five weeks! I'm gonna go find her I nice house to live in, so she doesn't have to live with pops anymore. Your going to help." Jerico answered

"The finally meeting your sis part, yay. The finding a house, why do I have to get involved?"

"I need some one to keep her company, and besides she says pop has been coming home drunk more often. She says he's been throwing things at the walls and stuff. But relax it's not that hard all you have to do is say a simple hello, goodbye, and hang out with her for a while." Jerico stated.

"Fine I guess I'll do it." Joey replied rolling his eyes, "Can I atleast get her name so I don't look like and idiot."

"Looking like an idiot for you come naturaly," he said with sarcasm, "but her name's Yalana."

"Ah, thats an interesting name."

"Yeah she seems to like it."

"Nice. Well before we talk more about the arrival of your sis, let's get some shut eye. If we don't we'll be like zombies paying no god damn attention. The commander will be pissed!" Joey said as he put his sword away.

"True that. I guess we'll talk more tomorrow." responded Jerico as they got into their beds.

A few minutes passed and Jerico's snoring could already be heard. Though it may not have sounded like it, Joey was excited that Jerico's sister was coming to visit. Truthfully he couldn't help but let his mind wander on what Yalana looked like since Jerico never showed him a picture of her, and also because it was the first time in a long time that he had something else to think about other than his dead parents or hospitalized sister. Judging on what Jerico told him about her being the best unlisensed alchemist that he knew, other than Joey himself, and the fact that she had a list of guys waiting to go out with her, he imagined some one nerdy but strangly hot. He silently shuddered to himself. Nerd hotness was to much for him, he liked the ones with brains but not so much he didn't understand them. So far he's never met anybody who he's liked for personality yets and it would be weird is Jerico's sister was the first. His deep thoughts about meeting Yalana drove him into sleep, and out again the next morning.

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tha's all for now more later.

[Michael Roach]

Wow, that's long! I'll have to read it when I'm in the mood to read something that long. But that's cool that you're making your own anime though!

[Morrighan]

This should be in the Crossovers Forum, so I shall move it.

[twistedrealityoflove]

be usre to check out part two after part one! and tell me is they're good or not