The Common Cold [prologue NC-17]
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rain2cry
- Pilot Candidate||Goddess in Training
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It was good, but the way you wrote the character's thpughts using ::thought:: was really a bit...annoying. Other than that, I really can't complain, but try adding more depth and detail to the characters as you go along. Good job anyway,
Keep your fears to yourself...but share your courage.
~You can either see through people, or see people through.
~Have patience with all things; but chiefly have patience with yourself.
~Only the craziest or wisest of people ever or never change. Are you either?
~You can either see through people, or see people through.
~Have patience with all things; but chiefly have patience with yourself.
~Only the craziest or wisest of people ever or never change. Are you either?
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Karu Black
- Pilot Candidate||Goddess in Training
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Hey everyone i edited this, filling in some holes and stuff so i hope you like the edition to the story. Don't forget to read the other chapters. 
Karu Black Website Confused Emotions
xanga site War Fields
All stressed out and no one to choke!
Reality is nice, but I wouldn''t want to live in there.
STUPID KILLS...but not enough to really help.
