Very nice story and I can see the drama that's quickly building up! Some small issues though
Relena had no idea what she was doing she just did it.
You need a comma or period after the word doing.
Other than that, great job!
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- Thu Jun 03, 2010 5:29 pm
- Forum: Blissful Ignorance (Heero x Relena) Fanfiction Showcase
- Topic: Heero's Big Oops: Chapter Three
- Replies: 3
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- Sat May 01, 2010 7:55 pm
- Forum: Blissful Ignorance (Heero x Relena) Fanfiction Showcase
- Topic: Queen of the World [One-Shot, NC-17 - CoL Pledge]
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1373
- Sat May 01, 2010 7:37 pm
- Forum: Blissful Ignorance (Heero x Relena) Fanfiction Showcase
- Topic: Heero's Big Oops, Chapter two
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1820