Blissful Ignorance

Whoa this thing is like long man... but still its all good. lol .. where in a thight spot thats from brother where out thou right. and the next episode title The guy that I kinda like is a Captain. lol. I know how hard it must to write but man you gots to fill the pot holes look, this idea is good ...

Why is it soooooo short. I cant understand the part about the whistling. I really dont. why did Tessa run out? Ok but this episode is pretty cool. Hey man I just realized something right now this is the only fan fic i read here in the Whole web site lol. well good job and I cant wait for the next ...

oh yeah that was really sweet ending about thank you my valentine

Wow cool 8) . The game show thing was hilarious and when he told mizuki that he was gay and he got busted. I didnt get the part when he just started giving out flowers to all the girls. Also why the f*ck does everybody feel or think they know david i mean is he a terrorist or something. Well any way ...

Its a llittle bit better. easier to reads and understand. and you filled up some of the holes thats a marvalous improvement. I love the time thingy very military. and you kept the comercial lol

Keep up the good job

Im giving out ideas

Souske going on some stupid game show

New people that would fall in love with kaname and tessa or souske

We need to see more of kurz and melisa

Also get kaname's dad a new wife for a twist

let her sister go to tokyo and let her fall in love with souske


ok let me rest and ...

Hey man I got names
John
kazuki
fujiko
kiana
Code names
Knight
Devil
Mime
Hawk (great for snipers)
Lotus (I wonder how would the japenese pronounce lotus)
heavy
fire

i hope this helps ooooooooohhh yeah also i have an idea
Ill start a new topic for it K

Wow! gj man. This is a nice fan fiction. Let me guess your first name is also david in real life. lol. well the new character is weird and you could put a hell of a lot of twists. in here also i saw your other posts. What di you mean by least likely to be i mean wth lol. I love the comercial things ...