Blissful Ignorance

"Yo Heero...you coming?" said Duo as the guys prepared for an op to take out a Martion base. "Yeah...I'm coming" replied Heero as he put out his ciggeret and poped a ring in to his pocket. Two months passed since Relena was rescued and over that time Zecks, Trowa, Duo, and Quatra were all now maried and as for the state of the war, The Preventers had there forces in space holding back the martion fleets that were still strong, wile on Earth areas that were not captured by The Martion Federation were strenthened by Leo and Aries suit that The Preventers had stashed for this type of ocation.


The enemy base was 20 kilomiters behind Martion lines but With the Gundams and their pilots fighting as part of a ESUN military special ops team the base was desimated in no time and all six were back at base looking foward to some leave time to relax and take some well deserved time off from the war. "Trowa, how's thing at home?" asked Zecks as hey got off Epyon. "Cathy and I are going crazy over wether or not to see if it's a boy or girl" replied Trowa as he undid his combat vest. Zecks said "Noin and I know it's a boy but we're thinking of a name but that's easier said than done"

"More male bonding boys...Hey Heero, Wu Fai...When are the two of you going to pop the question?" said Duo as he comes out with a six pack for the guys "I'm thinking about it." said Heero "Sally and I are concidering it" replied Wu Fai "You two need to try some new shit to get things going" said Duo a he took a chug of beer "I'm not the one leting my girlfriend fuck me in the ass with a strap on because I'm not that bored that I need it...You and Quatra have kinki wifes" said Wu Fai as he walked off to head home

Relena was walking down by that beach were she first met Heero and noticed an old yet very well maintaned Harley Davidson and saw Heero standing there looking at the sun set. "Heero" said Relena as she walked down to see Heero wearing a brown leather A-2 flight jacket she noitced the patch with a set of gold wings on it. The wings had a pair of crossed arrows with a dagger throu them and were the symbol of mobile suit special ops pilots. Relena ran in to Heeros arms.

Relena looked into Heeros eyes and saw how warm they were as never before. "Heero...What's wrong?" asked Relena "Nothing...I've just had a lot of time to think of what to do with my life." ansered Heero "Heero...what are you tring to say?" asked Relena "Acualy it's more of a question." said Heero as he went in to his jacket pocket and pulled out a black box and have it to her and Relenas eyes became bright as she saw what was in it.

"You don't mind?" asked Heero "Mind what?" asked Relena "Being maried to a profestional solgier." said Heero "Only if you don't mind putting up with the political bullshit" said Relena as they kissed deepley and passionately

I have mixed feelings about this one. It looks as if it's just cut off, the punctuation is just[/] okay, and please don't take offense at me being a stickler for spelling.

Also, try to make a new paragraph each time someone speaks. It makes it easier to determine the speaker. That, and the paragraphs are spaced as if the two events happen in the same area. I would suggest some sort of divider:

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Any of those will do, but make sure you're consistent in using them.

Aside from the usage mistakes above, it would be a good fic. Just revise it well, and it will hold up!

well i liked it, you did have a few mistakes. But it was still good. I like the way this story has gone. keep it up