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Relena?

Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2004 8:51 pm
by Shingami
Relena?

Disclaimer: I don?t own gundam wing blah blah blah

AN: This is my first ever fanfic so go easy on it thre may be a lot of grammar mistakes ect. The story is mostly about why heero feels that he doesn?t deserve relena. Please review.

Relena? it?s funny how one word can mean so much to one man and how everytime it escapes my lips i feel alive as i see the smile light the face of the owner of the beautiful name.

Relena? the wings of peace which looks down apon everyone with no judgement but with understanding eyes and loving hands, with wings so pure that light is nothing but a shadow in their presence.

Relena? the one that offers her soul and heart to a man which hands have cause so many deaths that they are permantly stained with blood. The one that?s night are full of nightmares and haunted by those innocent people which died due to his mistakes.

Relena? the one that raises her hand to carry mines with no regards to the past and only with the future shinning brightly in her eyes.

Relena? yet i struggle to raise my hand to meet hers. I struggle to drag her down into the hell which is my life. I struggle to redeem myself from my past by soaking her pure wings with my hands so stained with red.

Relena? so i blend into the shadows once again to be forgotten, to escape my way out of this hell and escape happiness that is promised with her hand. This is my punishment, love? Lips that i may never taste, eyes that I may never look into and see my reflection shinning in them and love as she tells me she loves me ever moment she can.

Relena i?m sorry?

Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2004 7:49 am
by Raspberry
Very touching. And very as for you first fanfic. Write more, and then your skills will increase :D :D :D Good job, Shini :wink: :D

Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2004 7:53 am
by Raspberry
And very as for you first fanfic
I meant very good -_-;

Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2004 1:51 pm
by Shingami
Thnx Raspberry :D. Yea im writing more atm and if i could get anywhere near as good as most of the writers on this board i would be amazed. Practise makes perfect i suppose.

Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2004 7:38 pm
by PinkDelusion
Sweet and poetic -- though it leaves one wondering what exactly dear Heero is sorry for...Your first fic? Great start!
pinkdelusion

Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 12:08 am
by wicked
Very nicely done for a first fic. It'd be nice to see you expand upon this side of Heero in the future.

I like your take on his thoughts and feelings. Keep going. ^_^ I'd like to see what else you can come with, and even longer.

~Wicked

Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 9:48 am
by Shingami
Thnx Pink, Wicked. I may write a sequal to it in the future more in terms of a story though, again thnz for the comments :).

Posted: Mon Jun 21, 2004 11:43 pm
by Lady Casper
pls write more to this

this isnt right noooooo
he left her nooooo
heero dont leave relena nooooooo

lol Im just playin this is really good shingami *_*

Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 3:15 am
by Shingami
Thnx casper, glad you liked it.

Posted: Tue Jun 22, 2004 3:07 pm
by Faye Faye
Tres Jolie! ^_^ I look forward to more!

Faye Faye