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Void in my heart

Posted: Mon Nov 17, 2003 3:13 pm
by Kari
Void in my heart.
By Kari
Genre: Angst

Author's Note: Don't really know what came over me but I had a bad day at school and wrote this. And I decided that it could be used for Relena.
So R/R. :lol:

Am I really happy?
Somehow I know that I am not.
Everyone I knows think I am.
But it isn't even close to what I really feel.

They think I am because
I put on my fake smile
and smile brighter than the sun
But with every empty smile
My heart shatters

No one even knows who I really am
No one doesn't know what in a turmoil I am

I feel so empty
Emptier than an empty can
No one can grab me
No one can save me

Except him
The one who makes the ground under my feet tremble
The one who can make me tongue tied
Me, the feared and bold politician tongue tied
Unimaginable

He is to one who understands me
But he is out of my reach
He won't even talk to me

I wish...

I wish I could help him
That he would let me in
Maybe he can help fill the void in my heart
And I ...
And I can help patch up his wounded and shattered soul

For all eternity I would help him
Stand by his side
With nothing to break us apart

But when will he come?




So what did you think? I know kinda sad don't you think? That's really unlike me. But it was something that I cooked up in ten minutes and decided to change something here and there and post it here on BI.
Kari :o :o :o :o :o :o :o :salute: :-P

Posted: Mon Nov 17, 2003 3:26 pm
by Lady Saffir
I like the last four lines best. It made me remember the end of the manga, where Heero's walking away. He's looking back, but he's still walking away. And this would be easy to write a sequel to - either Heero's POV, or when he finally realizes what he's missing.

:D

LS

Posted: Mon Nov 17, 2003 3:30 pm
by bookworm
Ooooooohhhhhhhhhhh, what a wonderful poem. It makes me teary. See. :cry:
And this would be easy to write a sequel to - either Heero's POV, or when he finally realizes what he's missing.
I totally agree w/ Lady Saffir here. It is a great place to have a sequel.

Posted: Mon Nov 17, 2003 6:45 pm
by Andrea
I liked it. Very deep. And I, too, totally agree with Lady Saffir, the last four lines got to me.

Fantastic second post, Kari!