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Poem: When Your Here

Posted: Mon Oct 20, 2003 8:05 pm
by illiterate
Short (two seconds to read and an extra three to reply) Relena POV poem reflecting on Heeros nightly visits.

Disclaimer: Gundam Wing does not belong to me, not that I mention any character names in this anyway, but the song err poem or whatever is mine however, so Bleh! :-P

When Your Here
by: Illiterate

In the darkest hours of night
When the shadows fall in my mind
That?s when you come
To you rescue me
Sleepless nights are rectified
It?s you eyes I can?t deny
This is were I belong
You come to drown
And sweep my fears away

Lay me down
So ever gently
Take me in your arms
And love me
Make me yours
Just please stay with me
It?s your love
That leads me through the dark

I am not sure
But it might be love
Here in my room
With you inside me
And your body flush against mine
I have it all

When you?re here

AN: I really, really like some parts of this and I really hate others but the melody I created in my head for it was just too damn good to pass by. Please any thoughts criticism or the rare praise is appreciated.

Posted: Mon Oct 20, 2003 11:35 pm
by Andrea
Lay me down
So ever gently
Take me in your arms
And love me
Make me yours
Just please stay with me
It’s your love
That leads me through the dark
So beautiful. So much depth. Impressive, illiterate, excellent piece of work.

Posted: Tue Oct 21, 2003 11:33 pm
by illiterate
Oh thank God there's at least one reply. :roll:

Thanks for the suppot Andrea :D

Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2003 8:18 am
by Morrighan
This is really good!! Very relateable (sp?)!

Great job, illiterate!