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Poem: Over

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2003 4:59 pm
by illiterate
Blah! This one is just plain weird but a little interesting. White is Heero, Red Relena. Err... yah... you?ll catch on ...I hope :(

Disclaimer: I do not own anything!
...well yes I do, but it seems like nothing when compared to Gundam Wing and is characters. So
I no own them, but the word themselves are all mine. Yes yes all mine.

Over
by: Illiterate

There are thoughts that complicate me
Confused this is helping not
Hiding all I most desire
In shame I fight to over come
Needing just a simple answer
Innocent in your own thoughts
I refuse to give that answers
Fearing what it might become

Learned now the paths we must take
Shall we fall and become lost
Step now forward all that can be
Hangs within our very grasp


What if we should start this over
That is but a simple answer
What if we confess to our truths
The pathways will open to us

It is just a simple question
Answer now or die alone

This can only make things harder
If you try to fight it off
But will I cower in the presence
Help me now to over come
I will hold as high as I can
Than I shall try not to hide it

Learn it now the paths are open
We should not be ignorant
Step now forward head held highly
For we will cross together

Confess will you

Confess I shall
Confess

Light shine upon us
Darkness recede now


AN: Strange No? I just started writing this and about halfway through I realized that It was split up between two people. Something I?ve never seen before, although I?m sure it?s out there. So I decided to let it keep going and thus this end product. Please tell me if you liked it or were totally appalled by it. *pictures Heero and Relena in a ?Moulin Rouge? setting, singing a duet* :eek: THAT is absolutely not what I intended.
:-?
Don?t look at me like that. I was thinking of a lovely little lemon with absolutely no words between the two. Just pure raw emotion, Yah! :lol: If I could I?d write the dang thing right now. But alas I am a terrible writer and simply have no experience to call upon in that lemony kind of situation. :oops:

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2003 5:20 pm
by Andrea
*pictures Heero and Relena in a ‘Moulin Rouge’ setting, singing a duet*
Hahaha...!! Well, honestly, I've never seen a poem split it two... unless it has been adaptated to a dialogue.... Oh, well... Even if you don't believe me, I enjoyed reading this, I was a little confused at first, but then reread it, and voila! Very nice, and original.

Unique, illiterate, very nice.

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2003 8:12 pm
by Morrighan
Ooh.... This has a really cool effect.... I love it!!! :D

Great job!!

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2003 8:25 pm
by paxbanana
The colors help. I'm the kinda girl that needs colored instructions.

[Paxbanana reading instructions upside down.]

[Heero walks up.]: "That's in Japanese. You want the English side."

[Paxbanana :oops: ]: "Thanks..."

Anyway, I enjoyed that! I'm not so good with poetry myself, so finding someone who is courageous enough to do it, well, all the power to you! :salute:

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2003 9:23 pm
by illiterate
Umm... thanks. Didn't actually think that there would be anyone out there who would take the time to read these things. Thanks a bunch, If my bubble weren't so thick I might actually hug you, but I'm afraid it might give someone a concusion.

I have a fic I might post, or rather a song fic. :oops: It's acouple weeks old and I absolutly hate it, but... you know it's kinda cool to actualy hear what others think of my writting, good or bad it's all the same.