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Soft (answer to drabble #2)

Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2003 9:06 pm
by miaka mouse
am i the first to respond? ::feels special:: *_*

guilty as charged raine... i am a hentai even tho this is the closest thing to a lemon i've ever written... u bring out the pervert in me... u should be proud :wink:

Soft (1xR; rated R; 105 words)


It was cold. And wet. …And excruciating. Heero’s hands clenched into fists, willing himself to remain in control. His entire body was taut with tension. The hardness of his muscle contrasting to the softness around him. The mattress molding to his shape, the sheets brushing luxuriously through his legs, her delicate fingers trailing teasingly down the lines of his body, the fluffy cream layered on the sinews of his skin.

Suddenly, cold was hot, wet was moist, as another softness enveloped him. The softness of her tongue swirling at the most sensitive parts of his body. And the stretched string that was his control, snapped.

Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2003 9:32 pm
by athena
But bringing out you're inner pervert is never a bad thing!! I have yet to do that...I like! 'fluffy cream' hehehe. a little detail that takes a second time reading to pick up. Very well written! About time Heero's control snapped too. He's too in control all the time. Keep it up!

Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2003 9:50 pm
by Morrighan
I totally agree with athena (luv your SN!). This was really well done!

:D It's always satisfying when we manage to snap Yuy's control like that. As much as he would love to deny it, he ain't perfect... :wink:

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2003 3:12 am
by raine_yuy
*Sigh*

So wonderfully written hon!

Lol. I bring out the perv in you? Is that a good thing? Haha. But i'm so glad you've written a response to this challenge. And an amazing first response at that. How the heck are the rest of us suppose to follow up such a high expectation?

Again, wonderful little drabble sweetie. And Heero losing it...well, that's something you don't read everyday. Mwuahz!

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2003 8:24 am
by RyanEX2000
Heh heh.Is there any other way but lemony.....er.....goodness...to answer this challenge.If there is I'd like to see it.

Having the story end as Heero lost control was good.....but you enjoy teasing us as much as she enjoyed teasing him.

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2003 3:37 pm
by lilac310
good job on that!!!! :salute: ---> u made my friend TB horny here.... :roll: :D :oops:

Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2003 1:44 pm
by AngelOfDeath
BWAHAHAHAHA!

That just gave me the urge to cackle madly in glee. Good job!