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Posted: Wed Apr 24, 2002 2:37 am
by wsprs
So close, but kept so far away.
Your lazy gaze pierces into the translucent haziness which is me.
And I am complete. Yet I am broken.
Do you see me standing here on the threshold?
Can you feel my fingertips gliding over you as butterflies would glide through the air?
Butterflies?
Kissing the sunlight with their painted wings ? floating in existence as though every moment were an eternity all its own.
You close your eyes, and I begin to fade.
Will you remember me?
You answer me with tears.
Tears shed in shattered indifference, as though they are birthed from a different life;
A life from a world clothed in legend and fable.
Real to you still, or forgotten by now?
Was it ever real to you? Or was it me who kept it alive?
Tears are alive.
They have such short yet meaningful lives.
You speak to me as you claim the tears from my face with butterfly kisses..
I can almost hear the memory:
?I am a soldier. I cannot conceive of love and pacifism. But.. but If you must give me something, give me that which I have forsaken the right to have.?
And so I have. Not peace, not love, but something else.
Something that is more real to you.
Something once given for you, now returned to me.
Now you finally understand the significance of tears no longer forsaken.
Their only purpose is to die. But in their death, they take with them the pain and suffering of the one who abandoned them to their fate.
Yes. The fate of tears.
And of me.
So I abandon you as well.
I?ll take with me your tears, and the confusion left by this war - and leave you with the strength you taught me to rally.
You place a rose on my grave and open your eyes once again.
And again I fade.
With a final butterfly kiss, I cross the threshold, whispering goodbyes to your retreating form.
Remember what it is to finally set free your tears.
That is true peace, love.
That is who I am.
So close, but never too far away.

I've never posted poetry before. Blame Blackrose for inspiring me to try something different. It's her fault for having such an awesome site! (Erm.. I'm not sure if I posted this right... I think I cheated somehow - oh, well. Yay me anyway!)




Posted: Wed Apr 24, 2002 8:02 am
by Goldberry
ooooooooo, this was pretty! I like! and usually I'm not drawn to poetry! YAY! Good job and I'm glad you tried something different, it's always good to stretch our horizons! ^_^ Makes me think maybe I should try it....nah. :smile: I've never been good at poetry, but this one is beautiful. Very sad, though. Nice job, wsprs!

*huggles*
Berry

Posted: Thu Apr 25, 2002 3:15 pm
by goddesswing
Though you've never posted poetry before... Its one of the best one's I've read so far!!!I really, really like this. Its very different from your typical poem. And speaking of tears, this poem made my eyes glossy with tears. Even so, it leaves you with a good feeling. Write more! I've read other fanfics of yours and they're all good!! ^^;;

+::goddesswing::+

Posted: Thu Apr 17, 2003 9:15 am
by silent muse
Oh, wsprs that was wonderful!

-muse-

Posted: Thu Apr 17, 2003 11:32 pm
by WhiteWindRRose
wow...
sniff...
that was...
touching, blessed, moving...
wow!!!
i seriously love this poem and hope you decide to write more!
:lol:

Posted: Fri Apr 18, 2003 11:25 am
by Sissi
Wow...I am not a poetry reader, but this one caught my attention. A lot. It was so beautiful and heart breaking!!! You gave me a new concept of tears and I simply loved it ^^.

Really, this was an amazing poetry and I can't wait to read more of your other works. You're an awesome writer ^^

Sissi

Posted: Fri Apr 18, 2003 11:37 pm
by Morrighan
Wow! That was extremely well-written and incredibly moving!! Great job!!

Posted: Sat Apr 19, 2003 3:12 pm
by royal blade
excellent poem. You do really well with POV writings.

blade

Posted: Sat Apr 19, 2003 10:26 pm
by Kaili Charmer
I'm not one for poetry...okay, I lied, that was beautiful! I love poetry so I love that post! ...on to bed now that I've had my nightly readings...
~kai

Posted: Sun Apr 27, 2003 11:50 am
by Kiyoko
That was beautiful!!!!! I wanna cry!