Hm... I had been following this one of FF.net for a while but I don't know whether I had left a review or not.
From the looks of it though, I don't think I've missed anything from where I last read (I cannot recall exactly which chapter it was).
This chapter may have been a bit shorter then the others but not that much happened so it's more then forgivable. It was to the point - which personally, I was rather grateful for at the time.
Anyway, if anything else I would like to commend you on choosing such a twisted and politically incorrect premise. It makes the whole thing very notable in my opinion and I hope to see more.
So, the enemy has a name now? Listening to him think he seems as though he were some kind of Neo-Nazi however his name doesn't sound... European. I may have missed it but I do not recall a phyisical description being given. Unless it was done on purpose that is probably the only real criticism I could give.
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All in good time my dear. All in good time. ~_^ Like I said previously, more to come and much swifter than this last chapter. Even I can't believe the time I took to post it.Morrighan wrote:Finally!!
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If you use the same username then I dun-no think you left a review. But hey, at least you found it on FF.net. Huzzah! Though I still need to update it over there. But I'm waiting until I can get MS Office back up and running.Tumbleweed wrote:Hm... I had been following this one of FF.net for a while but I don't know whether I had left a review or not.
I personally still don't think it's that short but you're the reader so I suppose I should listen to you. At least to some extent. ~_^From the looks of it though, I don't think I've missed anything from where I last read (I cannot recall exactly which chapter it was).
This chapter may have been a bit shorter then the others but not that much happened so it's more then forgivable. It was to the point - which personally, I was rather grateful for at the time.
Thank you! I'm not that very PC though I pretend to be so I don't get hurt by the rl people around me. I just think the world's gone a little PC crazy is all. But yes, too many fic's out there are afraid of touching on sore subjects. Unless it's yaoi-NCS or something along those lines. Meh, whatever. I have dark thoughts so my writing tends to go that direction. So yes, you will definitely see more.Anyway, if anything else I would like to commend you on choosing such a twisted and politically incorrect premise. It makes the whole thing very notable in my opinion and I hope to see more.
Yes the enemy's physical make-up has yet to be revealed. All in good time. All in good time. There is a method here. Though Ames being a neo-nazi never really crossed my mind. To me, those thoughts are coming from the fact that the 2 closest men to Relena happen to be of Asian descent. But maybe I'm giving something away here and I really should just be quiet.So, the enemy has a name now? Listening to him think he seems as though he were some kind of Neo-Nazi however his name doesn't sound... European. I may have missed it but I do not recall a phyisical description being given. Unless it was done on purpose that is probably the only real criticism I could give.
So thank you both for reviewing. I sure do appreciate it. ^_________^
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Sounds like Relena is ready to kick some ace....*plays Rocky theme*
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Awesome! It is so good to see something where Relena isn't torn between Trowa and Heero. Wufei a much better candidate.... Although Trowa definately has the superior body!*drools*




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