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Posted: Sun Sep 24, 2006 7:21 am
by epyon
ok, so i forgive you for the hectic life and all that but even still please hurry with the next chapter
Posted: Mon Sep 25, 2006 9:33 pm
by amulak
Mehhhhh!!!!! Evil creepy Caan!!!!! ><
Heero and Relena- NOoooooOOooOOoo!!!!!! *cries in a corner*
*Retrieves her machine gun* Caan is going to meet an untimely (or in Heero and Relena's case 'timely') demise....
Don't give in Heero!! Caan's too creepy to be trusted!!!! He'll probably kill you anyway!
I understand that you're busy, so I'm just glad for what you did decide to post. Yeah!

I'll be waiting for the next suspenful (as I know it will be) chapter!

Posted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 10:10 pm
by takisha16
I am seriously shocked!
This was mean and cruel!
How dare you leave us hanging like this???
Oh well... that's a good technique if you want us to be hooked....which we are!!!!
This new dude is really fucking crazy mean!!
wait, that's an understatement...he is freakin psycho!!
I can 't wait to see what Heero does.....or doesn't do...

Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 12:01 am
by Aeris_Eithne
Nobody's giving you any constructive criticism or writing hints.

Well, here's one... Shoot Caan's fracking brains out!

Sorry. That wasn't exactly constructive, was it? Seriously, this is great writing, as I've said over and over again. I love the suspense, but the pacing is still a bit too jarring. I think you need to find your groove and go with it, if that makes sense. I don't know... It's 2:00 AM here and I'm still up reading this chapter by chapter, so you must be doing something right!
