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Mehhhhh!!!!! Evil creepy Caan!!!!! ><
Heero and Relena- NOoooooOOooOOoo!!!!!! *cries in a corner*
*Retrieves her machine gun* Caan is going to meet an untimely (or in Heero and Relena's case 'timely') demise....
Don't give in Heero!! Caan's too creepy to be trusted!!!! He'll probably kill you anyway!
I understand that you're busy, so I'm just glad for what you did decide to post. Yeah!
I'll be waiting for the next suspenful (as I know it will be) chapter! 
Heero and Relena- NOoooooOOooOOoo!!!!!! *cries in a corner*
*Retrieves her machine gun* Caan is going to meet an untimely (or in Heero and Relena's case 'timely') demise....
Don't give in Heero!! Caan's too creepy to be trusted!!!! He'll probably kill you anyway!


I understand that you're busy, so I'm just glad for what you did decide to post. Yeah!


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I am seriously shocked!
This was mean and cruel!
How dare you leave us hanging like this???
Oh well... that's a good technique if you want us to be hooked....which we are!!!!
This new dude is really fucking crazy mean!!
wait, that's an understatement...he is freakin psycho!!
I can 't wait to see what Heero does.....or doesn't do...

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Nobody's giving you any constructive criticism or writing hints.
Well, here's one... Shoot Caan's fracking brains out!
Sorry. That wasn't exactly constructive, was it? Seriously, this is great writing, as I've said over and over again. I love the suspense, but the pacing is still a bit too jarring. I think you need to find your groove and go with it, if that makes sense. I don't know... It's 2:00 AM here and I'm still up reading this chapter by chapter, so you must be doing something right! 



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