Carriage E (One Shot)

[Kainen]

Oh spendid! Such a story. Absolutely wonderful.

I was grinning all the way through.

It makes me want to totally fall for this couple all over again!

Please write more!!

[hhryah]

Well. That was one of the best fanfics I've ever read.

I loved how you wrote it. Your voice for Heero was perfect- simple and clipped enough to be right for an engineer, but not a soldier (since it's AU and all). It wasn't simple exactly either, it was... subtle. And I think subtlety is one of the most important factors in their relationship. Heero and Relena never make sweeping declarations of love for each other in the series- instead its a quiet promise, a slight look, a moment of protection, a steadying hand. And the innocent yet oft overlooked aspect of that subtlety, that reveals belief in a still cruel world, was perfectly represented in this fic.

It is a delicious mental image of an old lady berating the one and only Heero Yuy.

Seriously, you pegged Heero almost perfectly. (The almost stemming from the AU part- experiences help make you what you are, so he'd obviously be a little different in an AU than in the series.)

And then the moment had passed, leaving him to settle in to his normal evening brood.

I laughed so hard at that. Broody is the epitome of adjectives for Heero Yuy's daily character.

Huzzah for the mention of Duo and Trowa! (And Milliardo and Noin!)

?Shit... She couldn?t think ? I?m? I am NOT Pip!?

I loved the humor. This and the last line were humorous, but not overly so- again with the wonderful subtlety!

But as he put an arm around her waist to draw her closer, she began to respond, allowing him to deepen the kiss.

I believe the sound I made was "gMUH." That scene was so cute and yet steamy. I loved how you wrote it.

Please keep writing!

[Gundam Girl]

Absolutely wonderful job, Mel! I was all over this thing! Heero should've picked up a cookbook from her shop before they left. ^_~

Love,
GG

[perfectpeach]

that was incomprehensibly cute!

Sigh. I've seen men wrestly bears for a woma. I've seen then learn to dance, sing opera on the streets, even get a third job to pay for the perfect first date. Just for her.

But give me a man who would go through re-reading great expectations any day. That's TRUE dedication.

[Queen Scorpio]

omgosh! that was so sweet yet not too sweet. i didnt get cavities though i did have a few good sighs and "awwws". good job!