This was great and all... impressively realistic but HEERO CHEATED ON HEEERRR!!! how the hell can she forgive him so easily!? although I don't really think she forgave him... just me babbling. Guess people do many odd things when they're in love (Relena. What Heero did wasn't odd, it was plain stupid.)
Anyways, excellent writing, Shevey, hands down...
Andrea.
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Tremolo Violet
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Gee I dunno shevster...This has to be my all time favorite fic or yours. I've spent all night reading your fanfics and this one takes a cake....I love how you write "Life" you know? It's almost creepy how realisitc you seem sometimes. Come on girl, branch out to the fantasy for once! Just kidding. Then it just wouldn't be shevey then would it?
Never stop writing. I love your style. It's very different and captivating.
miss violet
Never stop writing. I love your style. It's very different and captivating.
miss violet
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Kanya Barton
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No Heero! Why are men so stupid and lustful?! :x I have to get off that was totally unfair to Relena...How can you do that to Relena Heero?! Argh!
Peace out!
Peace out!
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Here's a little known fact: Ninja tears can be used in place of olive oil to add flavor to many dishes, but they all KILL YOU! Think about that the next time that you're cooking with ninja tears...
Here's a little known fact: Ninja tears can be used in place of olive oil to add flavor to many dishes, but they all KILL YOU! Think about that the next time that you're cooking with ninja tears...
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I agree with TigerQueen. ~_^ This is definitely publishable work.
I felt like I was actually there whilst reading this...You portrayed their emotions so beautifully. Dialogue and description was just damn near perfect. Over-looking the typos, I'd say this gets an A++. ^^ Maybe higher.
Whoo...Don't know why I feel so breathless reading this. ^^ Take that as a good sign, though.
Heero >.> I can't believe meh Heero did that! Oh, well--I'm sure if you continue this it could...be to where Relena forgives him? And they make up? Not saying they live happily ever after--yet.
With some more development on them, it'd make an EXCELLENT sequel/part two if you come out with one/decide to continue this one.
Relena. ^^ She loves Heero so much. That's good--God, she'd freakin' die if he wanted to kill her, I mean, we all witness that ourselves in the series, eh? ^^ *Squeals* I love Heero and Relena. And this fanfic just portrays them SO well...Okay, now I know I'm repeating myself! Hah! XD Well, continue this oneeeee someday soon!
I felt like I was actually there whilst reading this...You portrayed their emotions so beautifully. Dialogue and description was just damn near perfect. Over-looking the typos, I'd say this gets an A++. ^^ Maybe higher.
Whoo...Don't know why I feel so breathless reading this. ^^ Take that as a good sign, though.
Heero >.> I can't believe meh Heero did that! Oh, well--I'm sure if you continue this it could...be to where Relena forgives him? And they make up? Not saying they live happily ever after--yet.
With some more development on them, it'd make an EXCELLENT sequel/part two if you come out with one/decide to continue this one.Relena. ^^ She loves Heero so much. That's good--God, she'd freakin' die if he wanted to kill her, I mean, we all witness that ourselves in the series, eh? ^^ *Squeals* I love Heero and Relena. And this fanfic just portrays them SO well...Okay, now I know I'm repeating myself! Hah! XD Well, continue this oneeeee someday soon!
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"Death and poverty love me so much they brought *friends*!" ~Vash the Stampede
"May you go in peace with God...Oh, yeah--thanks for the apple." ~Nicholas D. Wolfwood
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very realistic. i enjoyed it very much, with its considerable amount of angst and truth. my own parents had to deal with a similar situation (although, to this day, they still think i'm oblivious to it -- hah!), yet they stayed together... I also really admire Relena in this piece; with her forgiving nature and whatnot. good job. 
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___Shall we dance?
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Well written. Filled with emotion and the story wanders through intuitively.