Posted: Mon Oct 24, 2005 8:02 am
Jackie Reviews Her Own Story:
:x GAHH!! This is probably the closest y'all will ever see to a rough draft. What basically happened was that I ran out of time, so I didn't get to explain everything. Then I had to make a choice: lose everything that I'd written or wrap it up in five minutes.
Our compy has MAJOR issues, and considering that I didn't want to retype the whole story, I went with choice two.
Anyway, I'll be editing the last half, and adding some more stuff in the first half, though I don't know if I'll do it today or Wednesday.
Yes, Caliborn, the whole kiss was a surprise the way I wrote it. :x I decided to aim for keeping it more humerous and took out all the thoughts and contemplations. - That was a mistake, and so I'll be adding them back in. :-?
Stellar-Soldier, you're right, but Heero's reaction to his gun being tampered with I edited out in an attempt to keep it more humerous. I'll be adding that part back in, as well.
Epyon, Chicken Wing was a spoof thing I came up with. Heero is the pilot of Wing Gundam, Wing Zero, and so on; that's where Wing came from. The purpose of the operation was to scare Heero, and thus the parallel to chickens. It's lame, but it was better than any of my other ideas.
I decided I'd just go with the flow of "The Boogie Man..." which was also lame, but something I couldn't resist doing.
Anyway, thanks to all for the compliments, criticisms, and reviews!
:x GAHH!! This is probably the closest y'all will ever see to a rough draft. What basically happened was that I ran out of time, so I didn't get to explain everything. Then I had to make a choice: lose everything that I'd written or wrap it up in five minutes.
Our compy has MAJOR issues, and considering that I didn't want to retype the whole story, I went with choice two. Anyway, I'll be editing the last half, and adding some more stuff in the first half, though I don't know if I'll do it today or Wednesday.
Yes, Caliborn, the whole kiss was a surprise the way I wrote it. :x I decided to aim for keeping it more humerous and took out all the thoughts and contemplations. - That was a mistake, and so I'll be adding them back in. :-?
Stellar-Soldier, you're right, but Heero's reaction to his gun being tampered with I edited out in an attempt to keep it more humerous. I'll be adding that part back in, as well.
Epyon, Chicken Wing was a spoof thing I came up with. Heero is the pilot of Wing Gundam, Wing Zero, and so on; that's where Wing came from. The purpose of the operation was to scare Heero, and thus the parallel to chickens. It's lame, but it was better than any of my other ideas.
I decided I'd just go with the flow of "The Boogie Man..." which was also lame, but something I couldn't resist doing. Anyway, thanks to all for the compliments, criticisms, and reviews!
I changed a few things (such as the "chemical reaction when the bullets hit..." bit) and added a few others (Heero's thoughts on Relena). And while I'd love to spend more time "fixing" it, I'm ready to get back to my Crossover fic. 
There are still some things I don't like (Relena's lack of involvement even though it's her prank...), but I'm gonna leave it where it is for now. 