Posted: Thu Feb 16, 2006 9:19 pm
The suspense!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I like the setting you created. Heero you little....suprise, surprise for him in the next chappie!!!
Found the insert of Natalie a bit out of place though. Not enough background info to include her without comprimising fluidity. IMO only!!!! But this in no way distracts from the fab story!!
I like the setting you created. Heero you little....suprise, surprise for him in the next chappie!!!
Found the insert of Natalie a bit out of place though. Not enough background info to include her without comprimising fluidity. IMO only!!!! But this in no way distracts from the fab story!!