Let the World Slip [NC-17 lemon]
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That was hot - and way too short for my liking.
I loved how Kaname had that inner conflict going on - not to mention the whole toy gun with "water" in it, haha! That was pure genius.
Thanks for the awesome read... I am definitely glad that I got into FMP now.
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He-he-he... My, I would've been beet red if someone sent me a note like that under those conditions.... 
Great job!!
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This story was very enjoyable. I thought that Kaname and Sousuke were pretty much in character for the most part. I do have to agree with a previous reviewer though, the actual lemon scene seems a little rushed. I don't think that they would go that far that fast in the given situation. But I understand how hard it is to really know how to go with it.
As far as the placement in the story, I think it would be most likely take place some time after "A Dancing Very Merry Christmas" or maybe even after "Continuing on My Own". For anyone that doesn't know what I am referring to, these are the original novels that FMP is based on. If you haven't read them, they are awesome. You can find translations for most of them at www.boku-tachi.net , but they are only on the second chapter of "Continuing on My Own" right now. I am patiently wating for the next installment.
I have found the novels to give much more insight. Let us pray that the anime will also continue.
Good luck with your stories. I am glad to see someone who puts effort into their story like you have. I will look for more of your work.
As far as the placement in the story, I think it would be most likely take place some time after "A Dancing Very Merry Christmas" or maybe even after "Continuing on My Own". For anyone that doesn't know what I am referring to, these are the original novels that FMP is based on. If you haven't read them, they are awesome. You can find translations for most of them at www.boku-tachi.net , but they are only on the second chapter of "Continuing on My Own" right now. I am patiently wating for the next installment.
I have found the novels to give much more insight. Let us pray that the anime will also continue.Good luck with your stories. I am glad to see someone who puts effort into their story like you have. I will look for more of your work.
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I'm speechless, and having me at that state is HARD I was GLUED to the screen from the very first to the very last word of this MARVELLOUS fic!
Great, great job! Although I've seen only one episode of Full Metal Panic, I can already say that the characters were perfectly IC, and I loved it!
Great, great job!
I'm speechless, and having me at that state is HARD
I was GLUED to the screen from the very first to the very last word of this MARVELLOUS fic! Great, great job!
Although I've seen only one episode of Full Metal Panic, I can already say that the characters were perfectly IC, and I loved it! Great, great job!
How crazy
Stop talking about me as if you know me
How crazy
I?ve been running away from the ship
sinking in the depths of the ocean
Song How Crazy by YUI
Just be yourself.
Stop talking about me as if you know me
How crazy
I?ve been running away from the ship
sinking in the depths of the ocean
Song How Crazy by YUI
Just be yourself.
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AislinOriel
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Wonderful, predictable, and wonderful. <3
Quite in-character, although it's pretty much impossible to have a rushed lemon where Sousuke is completely in-character, but under these specific conditions, it was understandable.
A slight query. This stood out to me, because I read it outloud (not to myself, don't worry) that they entered the lobby of the love hotel, from the street, chose room 104, went to the elevator, and to the FIRST floor. Is there something I was missing... weren't they already on the first floor? Not too important, just something that stuck out in my mind...
On a side note, that love hotel was quite curtious with providing adequate protection. Very nice. And lot's o' lube.
Quite in-character, although it's pretty much impossible to have a rushed lemon where Sousuke is completely in-character, but under these specific conditions, it was understandable.
A slight query. This stood out to me, because I read it outloud (not to myself, don't worry) that they entered the lobby of the love hotel, from the street, chose room 104, went to the elevator, and to the FIRST floor. Is there something I was missing... weren't they already on the first floor? Not too important, just something that stuck out in my mind...
On a side note, that love hotel was quite curtious with providing adequate protection. Very nice. And lot's o' lube.
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Ohoho!! I loved this!! I loved how you mixed the humor with the action, portraying exactly the tune characteric of FMP. Sousuke made me laugh; he so adorable contrasting. He's funny without wanting to, yet so knowledgeable. His speech is so precise, no matter in what situation he's in, and his strong, yet somewhat innocent/childish character--your characterization was on the spot.
And well, Kaname... can a girl be any more sarcastic? I loved her impulsiveness.
Great job as always, Cat. I can't believe I'd never read this before now.