Okay, so this poem is basically a summary of what I have endured this week. I am angry at myself a lot right now, and well, this is what I came up with.
Weak
I scream at my...
Would you call it weakness?
I can't fight without reason
I won't fight to just fight.
But why do I want to hurt
Those that cut me first?
Is it the fact that revenge
Is sweet?
Or do I want to make them feel
My pain?
I am no longer sure
I just know I hurt
Because they first attack
But I remain quiet, broken.
I struggle to pick up
The pieces.
I try to forget
My troubles.
But they always attack
Just before I fix my wounds.
And when they do,
I am left with nothing.
Why do they try to hurt me
Without reason?
What is the aim of
Their attacks?
Did I first provoke them?
Did I make them need to do this?
Too much effort just to cut
Me deep inside.
I try to forget-
it returns.
I try to be strong,
I crumble.
They keep on digging
Searching for ways
What satisfaction do they find
In my tears?
Weak (poem)
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LilTrix
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You sound so blue 
I liked your poem, and believe it or not I feel like I can relate to what you are experiencing. There are so many who try to drag you down and make you question your selfworth. I don't know if this is what you mean, but that is how I percieved your poem.
Don't be so
and remember this: Punks rise up to get beat back down. Remember that when others are negative towards you. They will never out shine you.
Sorry if I got too preachy...
I liked your poem, and believe it or not I feel like I can relate to what you are experiencing. There are so many who try to drag you down and make you question your selfworth. I don't know if this is what you mean, but that is how I percieved your poem.
Don't be so
and remember this: Punks rise up to get beat back down. Remember that when others are negative towards you. They will never out shine you. Sorry if I got too preachy...
There are some who say
an array of horsemen,
and others of marching men,
and others of ships, is
the most beautiful thing on the dark earth.
I say it is whatever one loves.
~poem by Sappho~
Curiosity killed the cat but satisfaction brought him back
an array of horsemen,
and others of marching men,
and others of ships, is
the most beautiful thing on the dark earth.
I say it is whatever one loves.
~poem by Sappho~
Curiosity killed the cat but satisfaction brought him back
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teardropdangel
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That's some pretty nice stuff, Mellie. I'm loving it. Not luving that yur down, but the poem. I tend to be drawn to darker poetry. I blame it on me fifth grade teacher. *gave me edgar allan poe for my first real poetry assignment* 
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does he write poetry ? I thought he only wrote storiesThat's some pretty nice stuff, Mellie. I'm loving it. Not luving that yur down, but the poem. I tend to be drawn to darker poetry. I blame it on me fifth grade teacher. *gave me edgar allan poe for my first real poetry assignment*
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AnShino
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yes, the raven i think was a poem...he's a great writer, truly wonderful just like Mellie ^^
this was a great poem. i can relate to it, but in different ways.
don't pay attn to that roommate of yours...these people get satisfaction in seeing your tears and your hurt. face them with a smile and a wave and ignore all their negative-ness. i know it's easier said then done, but it's something that seems...almost required now. anyway...*hug* I luff you ^^
this was a great poem. i can relate to it, but in different ways.
don't pay attn to that roommate of yours...these people get satisfaction in seeing your tears and your hurt. face them with a smile and a wave and ignore all their negative-ness. i know it's easier said then done, but it's something that seems...almost required now. anyway...*hug* I luff you ^^
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angel222
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I guess An's right...but my offer to beat her up still standsdon't pay attn to that roommate of yours...these people get satisfaction in seeing your tears and your hurt. face them with a smile and a wave and ignore all their negative-ness. i know it's easier said then done, but it's something that seems...almost required now. anyway...*hug* I luff you ^^
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