[Poem] " Kismet "

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[Poem] " Kismet "

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This is dedicated to Wicked, as posted in my journal.


<center>Kismet


He stands among the shadows. Watching.

Always watching.

A protector. Her guardian.

Her lover.

There's a forest.

A velvet cape of green.

Where angels dwell.

Sky eyes and heaven's wings.

But it's raining.

It only rains when angels cry.

The forest drowns in sorrows.

Choking in pain.

Yes, he stands there.

Watching her, a fallen angel...

...trembling, fragil.

Broken.

She's broken, just like the sky.

They cry, they suffer.

They love.

The creatures smile, adoring.

Everything's green, velvet.

She's a traitor.

Her wings fading.

The creatures welcome her.

Yet, heaven cries its loss.

She's bound now.

To this Earth, full of sins.

Full of pain, and suffering.

Beneath it all, she's a godsend.

She'll teach him her ways.

How to love, how to smile.

And he walks near, approaching.

He's just a human, full of sins.

He knows no love.

And he still walks, eyes seeking.

Heaven cries harder still,

Wailing its loss, its void.

A fallen angel, clipped wings.

Loose feathers swirl.

Heavenward they go.

Kissing farewell.

She cries no more.

He hates no more.

Fate has come.

It's merciful, and graceful.

The forest covers them.

Ever velvet in its secrets.

A witness to this union.

Of Heaven and Hell.


*

The End. </center>

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Post by wicked »

Again I just have to say how in awe I am at this piece. And of course it isn't because it's dedicated to me either. ~_^

Oh Miss Sin how you have talent. It's such a stunning piece and I'm happy that you've posted here as well. Again it's just amazingly beautiful and brought out so much emotion in me when I first read it. You totally connected to what I was feeling at that time.

Thank you!

Love,
Wicked

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Post by angel222 »

:cry: that was so sad and yet so sweet
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Post by Mellie »

omg! that was brilliant! I had an amazing rhythm! It was simple, yet there was something so...deep and ethereal about it! so wonderful!

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Post by Tomorrow »

Wow, Andrea. Just... WOW. :eek:

I loved the imagery; so vivid, so descriptive.

I also liked the repetition, how you specifically dotted the poem with the image of the velvet green forest. Awesome - so graphic and symbolic. The whole piece just gave me chills.

Wicked is right: you definitely have a talent for poetry. Your diction, rhythm, and the way you weave them both together... it's just so emotional, so touching.

This is definitely one of my favorite poetry pieces written about Heero and Relena. You put an original spin on something usually so jaded, and THAT'S an accomplishment. :salute:

Wonderful, as usual, my dear.

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WOW. Seriously. Beautiful. I can barely come up with words to describe how I feel about this poem. It's wiped me away.

Lovely job, Andrea! :D
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Post by simmer »

That was absolutely gorgeous!
It was simple, yet there was something so...deep and ethereal about it!
^exactly. Just wonderful. *_*

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Post by Eienvine »

Wow. That was absolutely brilliant. Very beautiful imagery, beautiful tone to the piece, very succinct. Two thumbs way up.
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Post by lilac310 »

Amazing beyond words. You've outdone yourself once again. Great job!
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Post by Andrea »

*blush* Thank you, everyone! I was really upset when I wrote this, so I'm very glad everyone liked it. I'm really, really touched by your reaction. I loved all the 'wow's I got.

Thank you again, I really appreciate it. *deep bow* I'm honored.

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