Wow! What an amazing story! Very deep and moving. I'm not good at writing deep stuff unless I'm depressed. Anyway, great job!!
"If complete and utter chaos were lightning, then he'd be the sort to stand on a hilltop in a thunderstorm wearing wet copper armor and shouting 'All gods are bastards.'" -The Color of Magic, by Terry Pratchett
"If you think that by threatening me you can get me to do whatever you want," pause "--well, that's where you're right." - Buffy
Preposition: An enormously versatile part of grammar, as in 'What made you pick up this book I didn't want to read to out of up for?' - Winston Churchill