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I wasn't comparing you to any of the above poets. Each individual is his or her own person! I also wasn't talking about grammer or spelling. Your words can still have a voice with poor grammer and spelling. Heck, I can't spell to save my life. I also don't compose the greatest of sentence structures. Proof readers have the greatest of fun riping my sentences apart so they can be fixed and understandable. I allow myself to observe and absorb so that my writing improves. Cut yourself some slack! Your still learning grammer and spelling. Back when I was in school, I had to be in a special class because I was behind my own grade in english. Besides, just because no one replies doesn't mean viewers haven't read your work. Many are just lazy or too shy to leave a message. I posted something here once in the Orignal Fiction section. A short story I wrote back in high school that I thought was the best work I had accomplished. Want to know how many replies I got? Zelch, zero, nadda, none!
dragonlady9- may all find that which they are looking to...
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dragonlady9- may all find that which they are looking to...
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solitude
you see the true and wish to help
but all that happens is that you felt
alone with none to be with you
you see the answer and try to react
while behide your back they make a pact
it flips alround and upside down
till all that is left is just your frown
they shut you in with no light
while it happens you seem to fright
nothing worst than the one you trust
turning their back to you
you come unglued and work hard to fit
while they leave the dust and you too
they travel a block and it seems a mile
why things are happening you do know
a trust made ages ago in lay in dust upon the road
broken not by either them or you but a face seen for few
you try to fit the pieces togather even when they are scattered
then it seems all hope is lost when the door is shut and you are in the dark
you see the true and wish to help
but all that happens is that you felt
alone with none to be with you
you see the answer and try to react
while behide your back they make a pact
it flips alround and upside down
till all that is left is just your frown
they shut you in with no light
while it happens you seem to fright
nothing worst than the one you trust
turning their back to you
you come unglued and work hard to fit
while they leave the dust and you too
they travel a block and it seems a mile
why things are happening you do know
a trust made ages ago in lay in dust upon the road
broken not by either them or you but a face seen for few
you try to fit the pieces togather even when they are scattered
then it seems all hope is lost when the door is shut and you are in the dark
i am here either physically or mentally never both
my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have
i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:

my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have

i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:
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basically
i need to write more
these are all junk and thrown togather i need to think out something and then i might be able to call myself a poet until then i am a wanta be poet
ps how about that book you are writing how is it coming remember to send me a copy of it
i need to write more
these are all junk and thrown togather i need to think out something and then i might be able to call myself a poet until then i am a wanta be poet
ps how about that book you are writing how is it coming remember to send me a copy of it
i am here either physically or mentally never both
my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have
i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:

my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have

i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:
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- Posts: 72
- Joined: Thu Jan 19, 2006 12:19 pm
- Location: I Dont know
EMPTY VOID
a deep pit of sorrow
the trench of unending anguish
what once was full
but now a empty zone
the black hole of destruction
being that all is lost
no chance of repair
remains are limited
and fit through the eye of a needle
alone in deep solutude of silence
locked away from the world
crazy while sane at the same time
never ending fall that one plummits down
the long awaited end that will never come
the lonely immortal doomed to walk with no one forever
FRESH STRAIGHT OUT THE HEAD
a deep pit of sorrow
the trench of unending anguish
what once was full
but now a empty zone
the black hole of destruction
being that all is lost
no chance of repair
remains are limited
and fit through the eye of a needle
alone in deep solutude of silence
locked away from the world
crazy while sane at the same time
never ending fall that one plummits down
the long awaited end that will never come
the lonely immortal doomed to walk with no one forever
FRESH STRAIGHT OUT THE HEAD
i am here either physically or mentally never both
my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have
i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:

my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have

i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:
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- Coordinator||Plotting nightly on how to 'get' Kyo
- Posts: 72
- Joined: Thu Jan 19, 2006 12:19 pm
- Location: I Dont know
ok this topic went down the hole maybe i might start a new one this one may or may not still be here when i do
i am here either physically or mentally never both
my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have
i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil:

my mind is a black hole it wants everything it cant have

i have been to hell once
i took over it
then i came back
:evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: :evil: