Okay since i finish reading the full verison i was complete was in awe , So Relena said that she not in love with Heero but there sex is good !! OH GIVE ME BREAK !! she still in love with him !!! anywa you have to update soon ASAP !!!
Amour 1/? (Lemon)
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RelenaDorlinYuy1
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The Angry Angel
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*Another* fic????????????
Nobody can ever - ever - EVER say that Zapenstap is lacking as an author. Your caliber is in an entirely different league. It's tremendous.
Your style is very sobering. Very slow-moving, leaving out no details whatsoever, but missing a warmth that's so familiar with other authors. There aren't any surprising -or- *relieving* bouts of sentiment. All non-Heero and non-Relena characters come out a bit isolated and detached - no real bonds that syndicate with our favorite pair. I read all of these descriptions on emotions, and it's so exacting and overanalyzed. It's just exhausting, paragraph after paragraph after paragraph; and suddenly the story's no fun anymore.
Or maybe the consistent confusion without any convictions is how you meant it to be?? (funny sentence - three "con..." 's (ha!)) If so, yikes!! MY mind is gonna get in a bind.
I appreciate the very strong element of realism found solely in your work - that's appealing and it makes the situations easy to imagine. Nothing too fantastical.
Oh, and uh -- juicy lemon! That was workin' it!!
Hats off.
Nobody can ever - ever - EVER say that Zapenstap is lacking as an author. Your caliber is in an entirely different league. It's tremendous.
Your style is very sobering. Very slow-moving, leaving out no details whatsoever, but missing a warmth that's so familiar with other authors. There aren't any surprising -or- *relieving* bouts of sentiment. All non-Heero and non-Relena characters come out a bit isolated and detached - no real bonds that syndicate with our favorite pair. I read all of these descriptions on emotions, and it's so exacting and overanalyzed. It's just exhausting, paragraph after paragraph after paragraph; and suddenly the story's no fun anymore.
Or maybe the consistent confusion without any convictions is how you meant it to be?? (funny sentence - three "con..." 's (ha!)) If so, yikes!! MY mind is gonna get in a bind.
I appreciate the very strong element of realism found solely in your work - that's appealing and it makes the situations easy to imagine. Nothing too fantastical.
Oh, and uh -- juicy lemon! That was workin' it!!
Hats off.
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Thank you very much everybody! I'm enjoying writing this fic enough to post another chapter so please look for it. I feel a little weirdwriting lemons...it's been awhile... but it's kind of fun too@ I hope you enjoy them (and the story as it progresses).
Angry Angel: Thank you very much for the feedback, though I'm not entirely sure what to make of your review. lol.
*hugs to everybody*
Zap
Angry Angel: Thank you very much for the feedback, though I'm not entirely sure what to make of your review. lol.
Are you saying the story in its current style is not fun to read? That the story is not fun to read? Not fun in comparison to my other fics or to other peoples'? Is the lack of sentimentality good or bad? Is the isolation Heero and Relena feel in regard to other people around them good or bad? What descriptions on emotions? The ones I give of how Heero and Relena feel or what other authors have done and this story is lacking or...? Lol. The feedback is great! I'm just a little confused as to what your overall impression is. Thank you for the review!Your style is very sobering. Very slow-moving, leaving out no details whatsoever, but missing a warmth that's so familiar with other authors. There aren't any surprising -or- *relieving* bouts of sentiment. All non-Heero and non-Relena characters come out a bit isolated and detached - no real bonds that syndicate with our favorite pair. I read all of these descriptions on emotions, and it's so exacting and overanalyzed. It's just exhausting, paragraph after paragraph after paragraph; and suddenly the story's no fun anymore.
Or maybe the consistent confusion without any convictions is how you meant it to be??
*hugs to everybody*
Zap
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Alilamba
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OH MY. *brings hand to chest* I'm all aflutter! Geez, you really know your love-making, it sounds like! EE, I'm all a-giddy. Absolutely perfect. I think I might favourite it. I even read the paragraphs! And I usually avoid all the "background" stuff--BUT IT WAS JUST SO GOOD. Gee. GEE!
All right, now I'll go read the rest.
All right, now I'll go read the rest.
